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Re: Bloody Cravings
Hi! Okay, so maybe this is because I watched way too many torture scenes, but this seems a little ho hum to me. Not that this isn't a good way ...
Mar 18, 2012 -
Re: Doll Sweet Night
Quick comment! The word "offered" is misspelled. Anyway, for your poem! Maybe this is me being stupid (which is entirely possible, I admit!) but I really didn't get your poem. ...
Mar 18, 2012 -
Re: Deleted
A quick comment! "Friendship" is misspelled in your poem. Also, I don't get the last line. What do you mean by "Wakey"? Still... I think the poem is a little ...
Mar 18, 2012 -
Re: Commercial Love
One of the most curious lines for me was this one: "As she closes her fist around something hard-" And, this is going to seem a little strange, but it ...
Mar 18, 2012 -
Re: locker romance
Hey Lavvie! So, this is a very casual poem. Cool beans! Anyway... the main question here is why do you vow never to be with this person? The things that ...
Jan 30, 2012 -
Re: Prologue
Hey piegirl! :D So, it looks like you have a pretty cool work here! I mean, you have the king being insane, you have a bunch of battles... this looks ...
Jan 30, 2012 -
Re: Euthanasia- it murders humanity!
Hi Rika! :) Okay, so! For me, this sounds like you are arguing an argument that doesn't really exist, if that makes sense. That is, typically the argument for euthanasia ...
Jan 22, 2012 -
Re: Audrey Hepburn Kills Zombies Without Ruining Her Hair- pt 1
Haha... yeeeeah. XD The only thing that kind of bugs me is the "two seconds" line because obviously you don't take a nap for two seconds and she went to ...
Jan 19, 2012 -
Re: The Throne of Cymus Ch 1
Hey ninjas! Just a couple of things... Obviosuly, you are a good writer who knows how to take a simple story and to make something out of it. Tara, poor ...
Jan 19, 2012 -
Re: Succubus [Rated 16+ for gore and nudity]
So, I'm guessing it's about these goddesses (or succubuses) who can destroy people too? It certainly seems like that. Anyway, I am not quite sure of what kinds of thoughts ...
Jan 19, 2012 -
Re: Before My Tear Filled Eyes
Oy, I hate it when animals die. :( Though! I am glad it was only a dream! I have to agree with Lavvie here... the stanza did seem a little ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: WORST ENEMY
Ack, we can be our worst enemies, can't we? As far as this goes... I think it might be better if you added some external conflict to this poem! Right ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: Adventures of India
Hi! I think I am probably missing something critical here.. Azalea, after all, is an Indian and she seems to understand the sentiments and enjoy them where I (an American) ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: Anchor (spoken word.)
That video is neat. ^^;; Anyway, when I was watching the video, I noticed two things that I wanted to bring up. :) My emotions sway over the ocean. And ...
Jan 13, 2012 -
Re: The Cold
Hey NaRachel! :) Okay! Your poem was a really neat poem. But I must admit that it confused me a little! The two parts of your poem seem weirdly separated ...
Jan 13, 2012
