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Hello, and welcome to YWS! This is going to be an MTV review, meaning that I am trying to study and critique, and it's soooo not working, so this is ...

It sounds pretty, but I think you have to work on the transitions. The first and second line really don't go with each other, and you use so many images, ...

Haha, indeed! We love it when points are reset. This poem is more of a grocery list than anything. Instead of being poetic and pretty, you are simply saying that ...

This poem suffers from ridiculous rhyming schemes. That is, it's only purpose is to rhyme. Otherwise, it's just a laundry list of riddles. When it ends, it doesn't really tie ...

OMG. FREAK isn't that depressing, geez! Making fun of my baby. *cradles FREAK in arms* And not everybody gets maimed or killed. I think... um... one character might actually get ...

Dude! I don't know how, but I just stumbled on these again. The first one was SOOOO funny. The other two are a bit more of a private joke. Very ...

Hm think I'll bin this one. It really is a bit too personal. Thanks for the advice. Actually, what you may want to do is to make it so wild ...

Eek! You would come up with some creepy poem about bulimia. :P Anyway! I know you want a video critique but... you're going to get an MTV critique first. XD ...

Dude. This has horrible grammar. There are missing quotation marks, oddly placed commas, punctuation that doesn't make sense, words that are capitalized that really don't need to be capitalized, and ...

Hi kris! :D I'm just going to go through and comment really quickly on your poem, seeing as nobody else seems to want to do it... Tell the Moon to ...

Hello! This is going to be really quick because I accidentally fell asleep while attempting my thermo homework, so I think I have to get to bed at a reasonable ...

XD Dude, we're white Californian girls with the most unsouthern accent you can stomach, but Sgt Salt and I still gave you a video critique. And it kind of sounded ...

Hello Shadow Charleton! :D First of all, welcome to YWS! I'm sorry this critique is a little bit late, but it had to be uploaded. :) Sgt Salt and I ...

Hello jcloud14! :D I did a video critique for you. Basically, Sgt Salt (mi hermanita!) and I read your poems out loud, and then we commented on them. By the ...

Dude! XD Okay, so Grif, Sgt Salt, and I critiqued this. Sort of. XD Um... yeah! I rated the film 13+ because there is totally talk about sort of sexual ...