Snoink

Oooo! That's a great idea, writing a poem for mom. :) When life was all about Barbie dolls, Beanie babies, and toys. But looking back upon those days, its not ...

Dun dun dunnnnn! :D So! Questions that I would like to see answered in your up-and-coming stories (which you'll totally write because you're awesome like that): Who is he? How ...

I is too late! However, I'm going to pretend that this critique might help you in your quest for the Ultimate Story, whatever that is. And it's mostly a rant ...

Ew. You introduce several ideas and never quite finish any of them and contradict many of them. It's really quite rambly and very yucky. That sounds mean. Let me outline ...

Just as a side note, this story (as well as many others) are featured in the first YWS Literary Journal, which you can buy here: All profits go and help ...

GUMMY!!! I have missed you so! We must get caught up about things! Anyway, your poem! I am compost waste. I am a bag of

By the way! The no vote is me, just because I really can't stand those kind of polls, so I'll vote no regardless, even if I like the story. Which ...

First of all, welcome to YWS! I'm Snoink. I also happen to be considered one of the tougher critics to please on YWS, but enough with that! So basically, what ...

TAKE OUT THE RHYMING! Nah, just kidding. ;) Actually, it's really not that bad. I like how you used the doll to represent girls in general. Plus, the rhyming scheme ...

Hi Alec! :D I saw this poem and I figured I would review it. Normally, I'm considered one of the tougher critics in YWS, but I do want to help ...

10:39:10 AM Conrad: hihi 10:39:17 AM Snoinky

Vivid scene of an angels’ light.

First of all, welcome to YWS! If you need any help, feel free to bug me. :) Okay! So the critique! At the moment, it seems like you don't really ...

Hello! :D First of all, I want to welcome you to YWS. Next of all, I want to give you a critique. I think I might be considered one of ...

Are you sure? I didn't read the Judas part like that at all. The bible doesn't explicitly state a sexual relationship between Jesus and Judas and, although Judas does kiss ...