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LOL! Still trying to argue with your reviewers, eh? When will you ever learn? ;) So... this isn't going to be a review. Really. Because it's late and stuff and ...

I was wondering when you would post this! Just a couple of comments before the actual critique: -> Try not to use the passive voice. When you say, "my fingers ...

Generally, poetry is written to dig further into a subject rather than to gloss over it. ;) A cliche that comes to mind is, "Write what you know." As you ...

This is more of a summary of the conflict rather than the story. Or maybe it's a prologue... I can't tell. Flesh it out and make it sparkle. It'll be ...

Okay! So I've listened to this a little too much, and I still adore this album. However! I've changed my mind on one of the songs. "Quiet As a Mouse" ...

Hey Rosey! I heard a lot about this piece, so I figured I would drop by and comment. :P First of all, flash fiction is just that... you are supposed ...

Actually, it reminds me of The Wall in Washington D.C. There's a traveling one and it came to our town once. I remember when Mom went to look at it, ...

Intriguing! I don't really have any comments, per say, but only because it's intriguing and I'm wondering what is going to happen next. Which is good! Questions I'm wondering: Who ...

Dreamer! :P This is boring! The characterization is flat. You have Crystal, the class, teacher, and your narrator, and I can safely say that I have no idea why I ...

Hey pudding! :D There were a lot of good things about this poem! For one, you actually talked about something real that we could visualize. So that gives us a ...

Eek, penguin poem! *attacks* The main thing is that the two ideas don't really connect well yet. The transition doesn't seem to be there between the pie and her memories ...

If I saw this beginning, I would put it down and not want to read it. It's simply too confusing and doesn't have enough conflict in it. It's like, you ...

It kind of looks like you're saying the same thing over and over again, which isn't that good. And I think it's because you want to say so much, but ...

Hello, lilylynn, and welcome to YWS! :D The biggest thing I can see with this poem is that it's not really... aesthetically pleasing. That is, the quotes and the capitalization ...

Hello Addawen! :D First of all, when I read stories, I want to be sucked into the action at once. And that's mostly because I love to be grabbed and ...