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This is more of a summary of the conflict rather than the story. Or maybe it's a prologue... I can't tell. Flesh it out and make it sparkle. It'll be ...

Okay! So I've listened to this a little too much, and I still adore this album. However! I've changed my mind on one of the songs. "Quiet As a Mouse" ...

Hey Rosey! I heard a lot about this piece, so I figured I would drop by and comment. :P First of all, flash fiction is just that... you are supposed ...

Actually, it reminds me of The Wall in Washington D.C. There's a traveling one and it came to our town once. I remember when Mom went to look at it, ...

Intriguing! I don't really have any comments, per say, but only because it's intriguing and I'm wondering what is going to happen next. Which is good! Questions I'm wondering: Who ...

Dreamer! :P This is boring! The characterization is flat. You have Crystal, the class, teacher, and your narrator, and I can safely say that I have no idea why I ...

Hey pudding! :D There were a lot of good things about this poem! For one, you actually talked about something real that we could visualize. So that gives us a ...

Eek, penguin poem! *attacks* The main thing is that the two ideas don't really connect well yet. The transition doesn't seem to be there between the pie and her memories ...

If I saw this beginning, I would put it down and not want to read it. It's simply too confusing and doesn't have enough conflict in it. It's like, you ...

It kind of looks like you're saying the same thing over and over again, which isn't that good. And I think it's because you want to say so much, but ...

Hello, lilylynn, and welcome to YWS! :D The biggest thing I can see with this poem is that it's not really... aesthetically pleasing. That is, the quotes and the capitalization ...

Hello Addawen! :D First of all, when I read stories, I want to be sucked into the action at once. And that's mostly because I love to be grabbed and ...

Haha, that was cute! Ideas for chapter two... maybe you could make other people find out about the rocket? That way, it gets a little more complicated. First, maybe his ...

You probably are dying from the critiques. After all, this is a bit of an old story! However, I wanted to point out two things: 1) Saying, "This story is ...

I didn't really find it that horror-inducing simply because it didn't follow through. Call me an old fogie, but it seems like that wasn't actually the main conflict. If anything, ...