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hahaha! :lol: This is actually IMENSE! It was so weird it was hilarious! Seriously well done! I would start critiquing, but I didn't notice anything negative... I was too, busy ...

Hey there :) I thought that this was pretty good! You definitely have potential and I do like your writing style. I do have to agree with Snoink though. It's ...

Wow. I am touched. You have such a way with words... it's... it's beautiful ! There is nothing here to critique, it's so perfect! Andrew Lloyd Webber should be jealous. ...

haha! This is seriously imense! It is actually amazing! :lol: You sooooo have to do some more of these! Everyone will read them. I definitely will anyway! I actually laughed ...

Hey there :) I rather enjoyed reading your poem. Although, I do agree with Ben when he said that the beginning is a bit weak compared to the rest of ...

Hey there Trace :) I see that you're new to YWS. I believe welcomes are in order! So... welcome! :) I'm sure you'll make loads of good friends on the ...

Hey there Kevo :) I agree with the other reviewers. I really enjoyed reading your poem! I don't usually like long poems, but it was different in your case. What ...

Hey there :D I have no idea whatsoever about scripts, but this was pretty darn immense! :lol: To be perfectly honest, I don't really care about all of the grammar, ...

Hey there Ben! :) After reading your poem, I had a look at some of your other stuff. I must say, it's all pretty amazing! Your descriptions are actually beautiful, ...

Hey there CreativeFreak :) I agree with you! I think that this poem turned out really good. Bravo to you and your talented friends! :wink: Your awkwardness burns like dry ...

Hey there singerofthenight! :) I really did enjoy reading your poem! You used description very well, and I loved your use of effective imaginary. It was really original and unique. ...

Hey there fiction :) I really liked your poem! It was descriptive, full of imaginary and you used some really good language! Well done for that! Slipping away form me ...

Hey there Isha! :) I have to agree with the other reviewers, I loved your poem! It was descriptive, full of emotion and it had a really nice rhythm to ...

Hey there :) Your poem was quite good. One of my main problems with it though was that it wasn't really very descriptive. I've definitely read a lot worse when ...

Hey there :) Your poem was quite good. My main problem with it was the fact that it was a bit on the repetitive side. Like Hannah said, you seem ...