SimonCowellLuver

Wow that is amazing how you can have a short syllable rhythm and still have the poem to make complete sense. :O I really liked it and I must try ...

I don't get it. Why did he kill them both? What is the point of the play here? I don't really call this a play. There are no scene, characters ...

What do you call this but i am going to be straight oiut with you this sucks. But I am sorry you have words in there that makes no sense ...

Thanks for the critques I will make sure i will edit

Wow this is a very good poem you got here. I think it got emotion and passion all into it. Keep Up the good work. I would like to read ...

Wow Jab! This poem is great. I don't have really anything else to say but it was excellent. Good Job. Keep Up The Good Work!! SimonCowellLuver

Your first stanza needs puctiionuation fixing so do the others. After getting past that you are good to go. Great Job!! SimonCowellLuver

I like it. I don't see anything wrong with it really. Keep up the good work. SimonCowellLuver

I like it but i don't really get the end you said the title was don't let me fall but at the end you want to fall. I don't get ...

Great job. I don't see anything to critique really all the technical stuff is perfect couldn't be better. I really liked it. That's all i have to say about it. ...

All you need to do is add some commas here and there and you will be fine. I really like your poem you have here it is very good. Keep ...

Thank you all for your crtiques i will make sure i fix them some time.

Finally something that is easy to read and is not cliche. Good work. I like it PM me if you need anything ok? SimonCowell Luver :)

This was a cool storty to read. i don't have a lot to say bout it because it was good. There is nothing really wrong with this. TTYL SimonCowellLuver

I agree with them abocve it was a really good piece to read. Careful of the commas and placing them. I always have trouble with that also so your not ...