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[quote="cathy"]Thick black marks are left What do you mean by this? After the essence of me has Fallen from the core of my world. How does this fit with the ...

[quote="Lil_Pau"][b]World Of Sin[/b] [i]Clip clop[/i]. My footsteps echo beneath the dark moon as I stroll down a dead lane. The houses are vacant, the windows resembling cold, distant eyes. Parks ...

[quote="inky_libertine"]I'd like to say, but it can't be this way. You're not the reason I love losing sleep. Truth be told, it's a love we just can't keep. Like the ...

[quote="1dering at stars"]Fear is a charcoal bird Locked in an open cage Hope is more than a whispered word It is a sage Pride is not power But the blade ...

This needs some edititing but don't feel like it right now so I will just tell you what is wrong with it. One is why is it just called Prologue. ...

"with your fucked up little knives with your fucked up little words." I Like your little poem you got here but this part I quoted right here makes no sense ...

Well to me I think its to short. But that is my opinion you can make it the size you want it to be. No offense I didn't really like ...

I like this but keep going. I mean by this is you need more in this poem. I like the rhyme scheme of the poem nice how you kept the ...

He paces his quarters, One hand on his belt. The other, beside him, Oh, the pain it has felt! The firelight warms him, Though not to the core. He sobs ...

"But, those words that we most don’t want to be true we do not hide: rather, we grasp the white and read the black, over, and over, and over." This ...

This isn't the best I had read. No offense of course but the grammar here is poor and some of the lines don't make sense. Try to make them to ...

Wow Very emotional but good. I am being a true critque here I hope i am not being offenses or anything. I don't mean to if you take critisism that ...

I like it really I do. I only have one thing to say the first sentence is confusing It says "your name: just call me ... A." What is your ...

Wow this is great. Very touching. I like this poem because this shows great potential and hardwork for thought. Good luck with your writing. keep on with your wriiting. :) ...