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SilentRain

  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Ugly Mirror, Pretty Mirror

    Hello!! Rain here!! So, I really liked this poem, it is well written and the structure is good. It flows quite nicely and the theme is a good one. So, ...

    Nov 23, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: "Are You Angry With Me?"

    Hello!! Rain here!! So my main criteque on this is that it is not structured like a poem. Just because it is a naritive poem doesn't mean that it needs ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Forgotten Homelands *Edited*

    Hello!! Rain here!! So, I liked this poem, I liked the idea of it, and the way you brought it across was good. But it lacked flow. A lot of ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: The Voices In My Head

    Hello!! Rain here! So, first I'd like to say thanks for requesting a review! I don't get many requests lately. So, on to the poem. Red- Grammer mistakes Blue- Things ...

    Nov 22, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Ugly and Beautiful, Terrible and Amazing.

    Hello! Nice poem, very real. Not much to say, other then a few suggestion: Blue: Things I think would help the poem, baced on my opinion. Red: Error in grammar/puncuation. ...

    Nov 18, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Storm.

    Hello Rain here! So, I liked this poem, the rhyming messed me up a bit, if you could have a set rhyme scheme, it would work really good. Red- Grammer ...

    Nov 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Dying Mother Earth

    Hello, Rain here. I liked this, it was short and simple, the main problem I found was that it has no set structure. I think if you have a set ...

    Nov 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Your* Poem's Title is Probably In This One

    Wow, it may not make complete sence, but, I like that you did this to try to get rid of writers block. It is a realyy good idea acculy. I ...

    Nov 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: A Moment when all things stop (poem)

    Hello there! I liked this, it was sweet and simple. At first i wasn't all into the repatision, but by the end it just fit. A place like this would ...

    Nov 15, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Waltz of the Rose

    Hello!! Nice poem! One think to say though, in the second stanza, your first two lines don't rhyme. Otherwise this was a great poem, the flow did get alittle rock ...

    Nov 11, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Lie, Daddy, Lie.

    Hello LoveBug! Ok, just because I'm your sister doesn't mean I'm going to go easy on you... So... Here you go: I think it was ok, could use some work, ...

    Nov 10, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: If I Must Die

    Well, I just want to say that I found this simply beautiful... I just loved it... The only thing I have to say is that the "wild" in the last ...

    Nov 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: I wish the words would come.

    Hello, I'm really sorry I didn't get this done until now... So, mainly the only think I find really wrong with this is that it really needs more imagry or ...

    Nov 9, 2010
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: remember when...

    Hello, so, first off, you need to capitolize "Remember When" In your title... So, here are my nit-picks... I wont piont out the caps errors, someone already has... I wont ...

    Nov 3, 2010
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Games

    Hello, Rain here, it makes sence. Ok, so, the main thing I think should be done to this poem to make it better it to add metaphors or similies, to ...

    Nov 3, 2010


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