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Re: Ugly Mirror, Pretty Mirror
Hello!! Rain here!! So, I really liked this poem, it is well written and the structure is good. It flows quite nicely and the theme is a good one. So, ...
Nov 23, 2010 -
Re: "Are You Angry With Me?"
Hello!! Rain here!! So my main criteque on this is that it is not structured like a poem. Just because it is a naritive poem doesn't mean that it needs ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Forgotten Homelands *Edited*
Hello!! Rain here!! So, I liked this poem, I liked the idea of it, and the way you brought it across was good. But it lacked flow. A lot of ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: The Voices In My Head
Hello!! Rain here! So, first I'd like to say thanks for requesting a review! I don't get many requests lately. So, on to the poem. Red- Grammer mistakes Blue- Things ...
Nov 22, 2010 -
Re: Ugly and Beautiful, Terrible and Amazing.
Hello! Nice poem, very real. Not much to say, other then a few suggestion: Blue: Things I think would help the poem, baced on my opinion. Red: Error in grammar/puncuation. ...
Nov 18, 2010 -
Re: Storm.
Hello Rain here! So, I liked this poem, the rhyming messed me up a bit, if you could have a set rhyme scheme, it would work really good. Red- Grammer ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: Dying Mother Earth
Hello, Rain here. I liked this, it was short and simple, the main problem I found was that it has no set structure. I think if you have a set ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: Your* Poem's Title is Probably In This One
Wow, it may not make complete sence, but, I like that you did this to try to get rid of writers block. It is a realyy good idea acculy. I ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: A Moment when all things stop (poem)
Hello there! I liked this, it was sweet and simple. At first i wasn't all into the repatision, but by the end it just fit. A place like this would ...
Nov 15, 2010 -
Re: Waltz of the Rose
Hello!! Nice poem! One think to say though, in the second stanza, your first two lines don't rhyme. Otherwise this was a great poem, the flow did get alittle rock ...
Nov 11, 2010 -
Re: Lie, Daddy, Lie.
Hello LoveBug! Ok, just because I'm your sister doesn't mean I'm going to go easy on you... So... Here you go: I think it was ok, could use some work, ...
Nov 10, 2010 -
Re: If I Must Die
Well, I just want to say that I found this simply beautiful... I just loved it... The only thing I have to say is that the "wild" in the last ...
Nov 9, 2010 -
Re: I wish the words would come.
Hello, I'm really sorry I didn't get this done until now... So, mainly the only think I find really wrong with this is that it really needs more imagry or ...
Nov 9, 2010 -
Re: remember when...
Hello, so, first off, you need to capitolize "Remember When" In your title... So, here are my nit-picks... I wont piont out the caps errors, someone already has... I wont ...
Nov 3, 2010 -
Re: Games
Hello, Rain here, it makes sence. Ok, so, the main thing I think should be done to this poem to make it better it to add metaphors or similies, to ...
Nov 3, 2010
