Silberfee

Hello ! Silberfee here for review, the poem is direct and clear and 100% relatable but I didn't like the lack of literary techniques. The only device you use is ...

I loved it it was much better than the last chapter, there was a good balance between speech and description...and the blog post at the beginning was so much clearer ...

It seemed that Finnley was always closing his laptop with a sigh these days. He was telling people a little more than he would have liked, a little more than ...

“So, are we going to do this study session, or what?” I said rhetorically. I think this would sound better if you mentioned that the main character asked this again ...

Well done on finally publishing a poem! Generally speaking I don't think its bad because the most important distinguishing feature of a poem in comparison to a story, novel or ...

The poem lacks depth, the main message the poem gives is that the tree can survive if one branch falls off in the last sentence you ask the reader to ...

Hi! I haven't yet figured out how to do quotations on here I apologise in advance. I have read your first two chapters because I did remember I want to ...

in between the first and second and third sentences I think it is a bit too blunt [quote] [ When I was young i used to think that my mother ...

Love the visual imagery and the blending of the words into one long sentence, but the use of white spacing slows down the passage. Is the mirror meant to reflect ...

Hi this is Silberfee to review your poem!! I really like small poems because they focus on a detailed image without using a lot of complex analogies, as with yours ...

Hi This is Silberfee here to review your work! I loved your poem it is simple and yet meaningful. I loved the introduction of each growth phase paralleling each other ...

Hi! I feel like I need to read how the story pans out to say more about it but currently I feel this is a great start to a story. ...

I never thought I would find something like this on this website (but I just joined so still discovering this website) Firstly I just want to irrelevantly say that I'm ...

I don't think poem is bad, on the contrary I find it interesting what prompted you to write about war and combine it with religion. It is different, and I ...

Love the shape. It makes it a bit hard to read the rest of the poem after the first stanza but it reinforces the idea of sacrifice. The parallels of ...