Young Writers Society

Hey its ya boy the knight her for another review so let's jump straight into this:

This poem has a very realistic feel to it by the fact that it uses facts.
It has a rhetorical question which pulls the reader in.
Is piece could be taken as a way of saying that if one area of life fails it doesn't mean you give up but instead you keep living.

Overall its a very nice piece of poetry keep up the good work.
(Sorry I'm working on tablet and was trying to save as a draft)

Hey its ya boy the knight her for another review so let's jump straight into this:

This poem has a very realistic feel to it by the fact that it uses facts.
It has a rhetorical question which pulls the reader in.


Overall its a very nice piece of poetry keep up the good work

Hey its ya boy the knight her for another review so let's jump straight into this:

This poem has a very realistic feel to it by the fact that it uses facts.
It has a rhetorical question which pulls the reader in.


Overall its a very nice piece of poetry keep up the good work.

Hey, here for a review!

I'm just going to say I wasn't too attracted to the poem's title, but to be fair, I just wrote a poem with the subject in the title too.

When you say that I could interpret this poem however I would like, I didn't really interpret rather just read it as if the literal meaning of it was a branch falling off of a tree. When writing small, short poems, for me, what usually works is I ask myself questions about the theme, topic, or anything else in general and then I apply it. I take a journalists approach to writings usually, in which I make sure a reader will have no questions unless I intend there to be an unanswered part. For you, I feel like there could have been so many interpretations of this poem if you had asked yourself what kind of interpretations would you like. As I reread this, it could be about a relationship. The 'between you and me' really is the only clue, if you were more ambiguous in lines such as "it won't be the ending of the tree" and put something else instead of tree, it would make it less clear and open to interpretations.

Next, I don't really like the rhyme scheme at the end where you don't rhyme anything with "off". I say this too much in my reviews in general, but rhyming usually limits the vocabulary choices you make and it kind of sounds like a childhood rhyming story.

This line,

Some may not agree,

A tree can calm you, guaranteed.

Chirp, chirp, a bird may sing,

Perched up-top ready to use its wings.

Circling around it with beauty and grace,

All the way down to the base.

The poem lacks depth, the main message the poem gives is that the tree can survive if one branch falls off in the last sentence you ask the reader to 'just remember: a tree can survive if one branch falls off,
but I don't see how the sentence 'between you and me'...(do you mean compared to you and me? ) / the bird flying around the tree/the tree calming you/ it altering in September fits into the contaxt of the poem

I just wondered whether the randomness of the tree related comments in the poem was because you were trying to create a rhyme?
The rhyme is effective, and I admire you for that because I take it for granted that poems do not have to rhyme. I hardly ever write rhyming poems because its easier not to.

I suspect you know that the poem lacks deep meaning already because you commented that people can interpret it how they wish.