Shreksurmum

plz review

thats fair enough, but im pointing out other stuff i noticed, anything that sounds weird to me, im not being evil, im just trying to help P.S sorry for accusing ...

can u point out the i thing cuz i couldnt see nothing? fair enough i noticed some of the spelling mistakes you pointed out and changed them, thanx for that ...

r u just being mean cuz i pointed out stuff in your new 1st ch?

kk thanx alien, i read it over and redid this, i think it better now

your can really write poems! although, this confused me, i didnt know wht was meant to be happening. but it was written well ___________________ Four towers, three friends, one destiny ...

thanks for the advise, i should of checked through it, when i read it again i couldnt believe how corny it sounded, but anyway i have changed it now and ...

thanx for the advise, oh and its Clumbo, not Mumbo

i liked this, especially the way you tell the story from the eyes of a cat. there were a few weird sentances but SirWozzell beat me to them, so all ...

i liked this story, the story as good and i couldnt take my eyes away. my only problem was in the first few paragraphs, it was billy this and billy ...

ok i've changed it so its better now

I agree that you should explain that this Perosk is a fox, but i mean, if he lives in a fox village hes not going to be a bloody rabbit ...