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Re: My Civil Thoughts
Hey, Bookworm! This is Shooting Stars like you requested! I'm sorry to say this, but this review will have to be short because I haven to leave soon! Sorry! 1. ...
Mar 10, 2012 -
Re: He Could Not Escape
Hi! This Shooting Stars as you have requested! The beginning feels very repetitive. I know that this is probably what you are going for, but it gets slightly old. However, ...
Mar 10, 2012 -
Re: Cocktail Origins (part one)
Hey! This is Shooting Stars as requested! Sorry for the wait! :-D I think that this was a very interesting piece and it drew me in with the first few ...
Mar 9, 2012 -
Re: Caged
You CAN start a sentence with the word "but", as long as it's a complete thought. Your second grade ELA teachers told you that because they didn't want to confuse ...
Mar 3, 2012 -
Re: Prologue Lunar Blaze
Hey, there! This is Shooting Stars as requested. You told me to critique you on how interesting this piece is, and I have to say that I wanted to keep ...
Mar 3, 2012 -
Re: The Desert Trap
This is Shooting Stars, your quick critique! -Firstly, the paragraphs seem bunched together so it makes your piece hard for the reader to read. -Everything seems to move too fast. ...
Mar 2, 2012 -
Re: Keychain Magic Prologue Revision
Hi, Mayhem! This Shooting Stars for a quick review! I have to say that I'm a fan of this type of book. :-D Anyways, I really like what you have ...
Feb 28, 2012 -
Re: Hate
Hey there! Shooting Stars is here for her reviewing session!!! I have to say that this is a very powerful poem, and it keeps you thinking long after the last ...
Feb 28, 2012 -
Re: Mother
Hi, there! Shooting Stars is here for a review! First of all, I think that the beginning caught my attention with the way you set it up. I wanted to ...
Feb 25, 2012 -
Re: Auntie Jill
Hey, UpandOut! Sorry for being late! Quick review: 1.I just want to say that this is a very important topic, and you handled it well. It has a powerful message. ...
Feb 24, 2012 -
Re: Racing on the Wind
Hello! This is Shooting Stars as requested! (finally) Sorry for taking soooooo long! First of all, I wanted to say that the descriptions were marvelous. They created an image in ...
Feb 22, 2012 -
Re: Lucy's Poem
Hi! This is Shooting Stars coming to review your poem! And here I am. One word: WHOA. This was a very powerful piece of work that kept you thinking long ...
Feb 5, 2012 -
Re: Who is my shadow?
Hi, Dogs! This Shooting Stars, your reviewer today. First I must say I really liked this poem! The concept was great and I can tell you put a lot of ...
Feb 5, 2012 -
Re: The Desert Trap: Please Close
Hi! This is Shooting Stars here to review... Well, there's actually not very much here for me to review. Is this a part of another short story or chapter? Alone, ...
Feb 4, 2012 -
Re: The Desert Trap: Please Close
Hi! This is Shooting Stars here to review... Well, there's actually not very much here for me to review. Is this a part of another short story or chapter? Alone, ...
Feb 4, 2012