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Never heard it but it definately seems like it tries to convey a message, that jealousy and envy are the evils of life.

Sounds great definately will go through it.

I like them too... Umm.. the last line really didn't work well. That was a good try i'll call it. Keep writing. -Ani.:)

really?

No probs! hmm.. there are quite a lot of crime stories which she wrote.

doubt u have put it in ur siggy,it is good.

Thanks Patrick!

Hey Nate what about my question?

Hey thanks! And welcome to the site.

u definately need to work on puntuations. The whole poem is without a single puntuation!

Hey Tom. Yep it was fun readind it. Keep up the good work.

That was a reallly good feeling of the love between a child and her/his mother. I liked the metaphor u used in the second para. But i didn't get it ...

no doubt it was refreshing...

That was really sweet. Poem was really meaningful,I wish there was more of it. Umm..puntuations would have helped.

Hey Aspen Welcome to the site! The poem was very short & sweet. But as Incandescence says u have a long way to go. Keep writing! -Ani.