Shakyll

This is really good. I like how he says that she should believe in him right before he reveals himself. One thing I wondered...does she know Ethelred personally in her ...

It's good...kinda hard to get the point of it, but I like it. It's good how you said "inch by inch by inch" when typically people say "inch by inch", ...

Is this a true story? Because you captured the feeling flawlessly. I love the prince and white stallion reference. And the king of affection and charm...it's champion. Maybe you could ...

I love it! It's really interesting ^^ it raises a lot of questions and suspense. I love how she said that there was a spelling mistake in the essay xD ...

This is really good. Just one thing--it seemed to sort of become less abstract and more straightforward in the end. The use of the word scary, for instance...I love the ...

Dark, and well-written. One thing is you might have too many "sadly"'s. People staring, but sadly misjudging. Tattoos cover my body, recognition of my sorrow Sadly it's time to let ...

Fascinating like all the others. I was kind of confused at a few points--was Violet being possessed? I assumed that she was and then she snapped out of it when ...

This was really good. Much fewer typos. The way you describe her fear of the dark is good, and your idea of making her face become "ugly" as part of ...

I really like this. It looks like it's the beginning to a really good story :] I was ecstatic when I learned it involved vampires. And it's an awesome idea ...

really good. I love his edgy attitude, and how you describe him as being "I, as a hormonal teenager, want to curl into a ball and start crying at the ...

I love it. I've never met such a prim, tea-loving, sophisticated, peace-loving dragon before. Very well done. But, as Cailey said, you should probably keep the spacing all at one ...

um, it's awesome. I like the sarcasm in the first paragraph x) there are typos though and I had some confusion over this paragraph: "My feet became ice cold and ...

excellent. I love love love the first paragraph about what each of them are going to do x) The dialogue is witty and fast-paced and the tension in the end ...

This, is really good. It's fast-paced and edgy, easy to follow. There are a few typos and grammatical errors and maybe some room for expounding on details. But I really ...

hmm...i love it. :D But I do agree with Tayla, about the line of generals barking orders. Might want to edit a little. But I love it!!! America definitely deserves ...