Shadowhunter14

Wow, that was great! Like Rob said, it invoked raw emotion and was great to read. The structure was quite good and I don't really have critcism for this poem ...

Hey! Great job! I really liked the idea of this poem and the execution was pretty clever. Your rythym was good but a little off sometimes, but it didn't really ...

Hey, I quite liked this. It did feel a little incomplete to me, a bit unfinished. I don't really mind the vagueness of it, although perhaps just a little more ...

I really liked a book called "Midnight Magic" By Avi; it's a bit of a fantasy set in Medieval Italy which i found interesting as most authors tend to write ...

Hmm. Personally, I was never a fan of Stephenie Meyer's writing. It was drowning in unnecessary description and after a while becomes, well, a bore. The Host just didn't suck ...

Well, I was pretty confused as to what this one was about - it seemed like a flurry of random thoughts that eventually kind of linked in with one another. ...

Hey! Good job. loved the title, and the general idea of the poem. About your flow: It seemed very choppy, the way you structured it. It felt a bit more ...

Oh wow. This was a very emotional poem that was raw and honest, and i also hope it's not based on real life. Some of the phrases/verses were great, like ...

Hey! I agree with papernessa, this WAS a haiku (at least, how I always wrote one) and it actually made sense. It made the reader think a little and I ...

Hey! Just sort of repeating what everyone else said. This poem was filled with great imagery and I liked your repitition. The rythym might have been a little off but ...

Hey, I really liked the overall concept of this poem. Masks are great to write poetry or stories about because there are so many different aspects of them to write ...

Hey, this was great! You have amazing talent and I loved some of your ideas and sentences. This piece made the reader think and hwat more, and you prefectly created ...

I loved the title, by the way, and the way you wrote it. I'm in Year 9 and have been hearing a lot about that stuff, and oh my god, ...

Hey! I thought this was really good :) I liked some of the ryhming and reptition. The rythm was quite good too. it sounded really honest and genuine too, like ...

Hi! Well done! I really liked this. I think the overall idea was pretty good. There are a few nitpicks e.g. "...her dark green eyes starred" should be "stared" and ...