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Re: Long Line, Sweetheart
Gryphon's right, but you do have great detail though. If it's going to be continued, put a note a the bottom. And the ending wasn't that...I don't know...intriguing as the ...
Mar 1, 2008 -
Re: Lost and Discovered: Prologue part 1
Kay everyone, I have updated! Pleeeeease read and review! I only have one out of like thirty right now... :cry: Pleeeeeeeeeasssssssssse :?: :!:
Feb 29, 2008 -
Re: Valentine?
I liked this a lot, but it could use some work. You might want to check where your commas go though. And add more beat or feeling into it. Overall ...
Feb 27, 2008 -
Re: Cherry Blossom Part 1
I liked your story alot, but there were a few typos. You didn't capitalize after a period, otherwise nothing I can see. I look forward to more of your stories, ...
Jan 29, 2008 -
Re: Short prologue...
I say exactly what Sleeping Valor said. GREAT JOB! ST
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: Hidden Secrets: prologue
Thanks guys you've all been a great help. I'll get to work on fixing as soon as possible. :) Thanks again, ST
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: 12 Shocks of Xmas (pt. 5)
:twisted: EVIL! HEH, HEH! Awsome! Anyways I agree with SirWozzell. Not scary enough. ST
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: The Forgotten Secret (Chater one- Caught Red Footed)
Great story, but you left out some words or used the wrong ones. You also need to space out the sentences a little. It was hard to read for me. ...
Jan 28, 2008 -
Re: The White Demon
I agree with the others, but there are more than just spelling errors, you didn't place commas in some areas where they are needed.
Jan 28, 2008