SeraphTree

You felt this? Hm. The 'poor me' writing does your feelings no justice. Think about what you really feel. Do you feel alone? Do you feel misunderstood? Do you just ...

I can tell that you were very emotional during this. Your detachment as you remember is real. I can tell because I've felt similar. :) My suggestion is that you ...

This is very interesting, albiet a little short. :( The Man stomping carelessly, feeling no passion, looking harsh. Thinking, in his deepest mind, about the pain of his words cutting ...

Author13... I'm sorry, but I do not like this piece. I'll tell you why. “Dad,” Eve said calmly, “if he goes, I go, and you will never see me again.” ...

put a space between paragraphs. :D:D:D:D:D It looks huge at the moment :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D

I will crit this tomorrow. It''s too late at the moment. :( What I've read sounds very interesting though :D:D:D:D

MONKI!!!!!!!!!! :D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D:D Okee dokee then... And you're supposed to be... No, no! Wait! Let me guess! My genie? My fairy godmother?!" I sarcastically ask. I close my eyes tr

It's hard to keep the story straight. There is no main character, which makes it difficult to follow. We need some more details and background. Thats the only thing I ...

This is a poetic response (this is not meant to be critted): Spirit ** Many wander the path, You think you tread alone. Don’t conceal this wrath- Don’t stumble on ...

The cold winter air blew through the quiet town, making the snow covered trees quiver violently. A hooded figure jogged down a street, making no noise at all. With a ...

I must say, it is rather refreshing to hear something like this. :D As Kitty said, we need to know some background. For instance, whe does the main hate her ...

Hmmm... there were a couple of things that bothered me... :) The crisp chill of the air sent shivers down her spine as she stared at the pristine scene before ...

Hmmm... I should probably crit your work, since I am your friend. :D:D:D:D Sorry it took so long :(:(:(:(:( “For once, mom, will you just listen to me?” Evelyn shouted ...

Sorry Sylverdawn, I completely missed this. :smt012 Rath climbed the stairs of the tower spiraling upward, at last he was able to reach the top of the tower. He staggered ...

You need to draw this out more. Why do these girls so willingly accept his proposal? How is this a contests? You need to give us more details. I mean, ...