Senmaster

Hello moonpolice! Senmaster here to review. Overall, I thought the writing was good. I really enjoyed the way you ended it, with all the suspense you created. However, I do ...

I would agree with Jedd. There seems to be potential with this idea already. Of course it would all depend on how you continue to develop the plot here, but ...

Hey cg26, this is Senmaster here for a review. Wow, I really like the idea you have here. I know some people might get offended by this, but I think ...

Hey HopeSummers101, this is Senmaster here for a review. Well, as I read this chapter, I thought three things: 1) You definitely have what it takes to become a writer, ...

Hey dogsrule5, this is Senmaster here for a review. After reading it, I would definitely have to agree that the chapter serves a better purpose as an introduction then a ...

Hey Fang! It's Senmaster here for a review. Ok, let me first say that I loved Maximum Ride, but if you're planning on actually making a novel following the series, ...

Hi MadWriter7, this is Senmaster here to review. First of all, I would like to say that well done! It was an interesting chapter with plenty to learn about the ...

Hello, CarolineHart. This is Senmaster here to review. I thought you did very well in the very first part of the chapter, taking your time to explain what she is ...

Hey Flemzo, this is Senmaster here to review! I would have to agree with Caroline Hart that the writing is very well produced. You have this way of creating such ...

Hi Silversecret, this is Senmaster. I really hope my review helps a lot. Well first I'm glad you put both chapters here because it really helped me get a good ...

Hello Klennon14, it's Senmaster again. Again, this piece is very, very good. We get a little a little more information about Ronnie and her family, and it really makes the ...

Hi Klennon14, this chapter was very well written. The dialogue really told me a lot about your characters, and you made it very realistic. It wasn't over the top dramatic ...

Hello BHanchen, That was an exciting read! It had so much detail, and I could really get a good feel for your character. Although as a reader, I haven't learned ...

Well Mloomps, I enjoyed reading the story, although sometimes it was difficult with the grammatical mistakes, but that's nothing some rereading and editing can't fix. There are just some punctuation ...