Satira

haha, I like Kuro's name. It's literally 'black' in Japanese. works for him. and Kaze is 'wind'. I know you probably (ok definitely) knew this when you were writing it, ...

Thanks for taking the time to review this! The broken sentences can be a bit much sometimes. I want to create a certain atmosphere, and the style of the sentences ...

thank you! i'll keep that in mind.

This isn't actually my first poem. I never said I was new to poetry. I write poems fairly often. I said I was more of an author than a poet. ...

yeah, i have a really weird flow. It's something I have to work on. I've never planned out any of my stories, and never have finished them, so it's bound ...

thank you! there is a 3rd part actually... 'part 3'. go to my portfolio, you can find it there. and part 4 is on the way.

all i want is to know if this guy and you share an iq. it's just like, 146. it's a really random number. and like, JK Rowling and harry share ...

i know it swirls like that, but i still don't really like the line. it's not the physics of it, it's how it's executed. but that's my own opinion. thanks ...

those lines, the ones you quoted... I thought of those first. the whole poem was very much built on it. funny.

haha, thanks for commenting, it means a lot to me. I would change this if I could, i really would. but this was written for a social studies project, and ...

Hi! Thanks for commenting! I know Phebe addresses the reader sometimes. This is bad, I know...I wish I didn't have to do the whole journal thing in the first place, ...

I'm glad you're so moved by something I wrote...that's truly a complement. Thank you.

thank you for reviewing! I'll keep those things in mind now. by the way, Patch is a sort of town thing. within this huge city, Ryns, there are Patches, that ...

aw, thank you.

and, yes, i also feel that i should've kept it shorter, you're right. The first part came very quickly to me, but as it dragged on i started struggling to ...