Satira

Hello! Sorry it took so long to get a review! Okay, so I think you presumed a lot of things here. That is not necessarily bad, because you are a ...

Hm...I think it needs expanding. You didn't show us what the guy looked like, and, more importantly, what he was doing and how he...moved. You didn't give enough atmosphere with ...

Hello! I don't agree with you on the subject you're protesting, but, as DrFeelGood said, you're a pretty brave writer for posting it. I would say that this did not ...

wow. This feels like a nice big knot of metaphors. I'm not sure if that's a bad thing or a good thing, it depends. I dunno about it supposed to ...

Hello! I think the concept of this is great, but I have a few suggestions. who was the witch? why did she curse the girl? Since an anxiety disorder is ...

hello! the things that you chose to 'sketch' out here are the right things, so good job. I know you wanted to contain this piece in three hundred words, but ...

Hello! I like this little prologue, and I'm excited to see where it goes. But I have a few suggestions that hope you'll take into account. . You use 'dear ...

Hello! Satira here, answering your plea! Kinda... let's jump into it, shall we? Okay, the big thing I noticed was that you're constantly being redundant in sentences. You don't think ...

oh my god, I loved the idea here. it's more imaginative than a lot of poems I see around here (not naming names). Welcome to YWS, and I hope you ...

Hello! Welcome to YWS! I'm gonna be reviewing you today, and I'm just going to jump right into it. Your formatting is a little weird. Actually, it's very weird. I ...

helloo! I think you need to expand more. You give the actions, but no emotion or a real vision of what's going on. It's like you're moving a robot. He ...

Hello! sorry you had to wait so long for a single review! Here's what I've got: You seem to get a lot of words straight from a thesaurus because you ...

hello, Swifty! There are some punctuation things that I don't thing need to be there. For example, the capitalization of Common Sense, i think you may have meant intentionally, but ...

Hi, Rage! ( i apologize in advance) in the beginning there are a couple of redundancies. you said there was a 'book tucked under amy's arm, and a glass of ...

Hi! You're really new, aren't you... WELCOME TO YWS! i'm just going to jump right into it... You say pain twice in two sentences. And it makes me feel like ...