Sassykat

Oh, this was so beautiful! I really liked it! I don't know sonnet structure, so I dare not attempt critique-y-ness, but I just have to say that I loved it. ...

The voice of this piece was clear. I liked it. I couldn't understand parts of it, though, and you need to work on clarification. Is the person you are talking ...

I think it's so sweet that your dad asked you to do this. I can tell you wrote this in a hurry, but it has definite potential to become moving ...

Liked it. Shorter, but got the meaning across very, very well. This poem portrays a very unique emotion; a "you've done something bad to me, but I will forgive you ...

Okay. This has potential. I can see the powerful message in this, it's just not blooming to what it could be quite yet. The flow seemed off in several places ...

This was interesting. I liked it. It was almost musical, definitely fitting for "lyric" poetry. I like how, in the third stanza, it seems as though this "elf" is, even ...

This is indeed poetry, in the artful way you expressed this. I liked it. However, you could make this more recognizable as poetry if you create line breaks. Like so: ...

I can see nothing wrong with this other than the last line. You've used too many commas. here is what I think it should be: Yet never able, always failing ...

This was....different. I think, though I'm not sure, that this was supposed to symbolize the different views on christ and repentance through different time periods? Let me know if I'm ...

This was pretty amazing. I loved it. I kind of interpreted it as "I know you love me, but you can't know my secrets unless you have the key--or my ...

animepup, you did miss a couple of things. Let me point them out: The b lood that drips from my veins Is nothing but cold and bitter pain I guess ...

" co-incidence" I'm pretty sure this doesn't need a hyphen. "and then wonder if I'm wrong or if I'm right" This line combined with the one above it looks like ...

I liked this. I agree with Amelia, though, you could use a different phrase as your theme. "One of those days..." I expected a depressing thing full of problems and ...

This is sweet. I like the simpleness of it, and how it just is . Sometimes I like a poem without deep, philosophical meaning to it, something that I can ...

Do you know how it hurts To see your friend Say s*** behind your back Being mean to you Totally ignoring you Like if you didn’t exist? If this former ...