Sam

This is pretty cool...I pretty much respect anyone who can come up with these things, 'cause I know I couldn't create lands and races and such... The tone of this ...

OOh..I read the third one...prolly not the best to start with but I loved it! Hehe. Love Sven. Especially when they go to Rosie's house and he's wearing a condom ...

ACK IT SOUNDS LIKE SIMPLE PLAN! *runs and hides* Hehe...just kidding. It was actually quite good. Like your role models, Simple Plan, you like to use the word 'pain' a ...

I'm going to critique this fully later, but it might work out better if you rated it on sections. Like this is totally G...you might get more readers if you ...

'“May I cut in?” ' They apparently really like to say that...:P There's also a point at which someone says 'OK'- not okay. The last paragraph was pretty awkward. Go ...

""You shalt lead your people to a land which I shall show you. It shalt be a paradise, where the grass is green and the girls are pretty. And thou ...

Since it's a pretty good story, I'm going to leave the plot alone and focus on the historical details. Late 18th century, right? 'My parents, Elizabeth and Jacob Pendleton followed ...

The Serpent's Breath...ah, that's class. My ship's names all end up sounding very, very stupid. My thing: Why does it seem that's he's the only one on deck? I mean, ...

I thought it was pretty cute...if you aren't going for cute, then I would definitely change the tone (and TITLE). Section One I thought was cool, except you need to ...

This sounds like something I would say so we will make it prettyful! YAY PRETTYNESS! Oy...anyway... 'Upon closer inspection I also noticed it was covered in (“Wow Ronnie, did you ...

*whines* I need a poem about ME! *claps hand over mouth* Uh...well..that would be very interesting...especially after that story that I wrote about you that made you hate me. :P ...

OK, so the boyfriend's a creep and the dad's a perv..very fun stuff :P Though my only thing: if you were pregnant with your DAD'S (*barf*) baby, you'd probably be ...

This is pretty cool, except... Most Normal English People Don't: Go to balls Become Servants Have snot bubbles that turn into fairy godmothers etc. etc. I think it could work ...

'There is no hope for finding a bucket of popcorn or a gallon of coke in the Willows Cinamax - those are the kind of sad and sorry disabilities which ...

That is sooooo cool... 'dammit it happened again. I had a dream, a memorable dream, one filled of obscurity, character development, twisted plots and life-like climaxes.' See, in this part ...