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Well the person above me pointed most of that stuff out! Besides that it was really good, i appreciate that you write these things a head of time...just heighting the ...

That was really good! Funny as always comrade, :). I think when Edward was trying to get his keys I got slightly confused. Either becaue I'm sleepy or maybe you ...

Hey, I really liked this post. I haven't read the others but it seemed well introduced. I would suggest watching out for mechanical[ I don't know what to call them ...

I'm so* happy you finally posted this! I've been waiting for this. And it's good really it is, a little on the short side. But with the things you talked ...

I think everyone esle gave you some worthy critizism! I think it was really good and you had some really great imagery. Question; Stanza One : Exactly what does wrath ...

I notice how at school you failed to tell me that you too...had a protagonist named Jerry! My apologizes ahahaha... Then again Jerrry's your protagonist and my Jerry more of...well ...

Hey! I thought I'd give you a review. I thought this was well written and had good content. :) Maybe if you want to improve it make sure your format ...

Well okay I dug it! And you can use THREE exclamation points if you want, thats the limit more than that and its too much. Just wanted to point that ...

Actually I liked it and for me it wasn't hard to read. Although I think there are some awkward parts in there and you misspelled "wave" at least I thought ...

Well I didn't really get the theme of the poem Am my dearest friend. But it flowed extremely well usually when a read a poem of this lengthn I've got ...

Okay defintely put some italics or an explanation point on the last word so we as the readers know to emphasize it. And I think your two poems could easliy ...

Reminds me of the motif of fire from Fahrenheit 451...not that it has to do with your poem! But I liked it and yet I am not considered the best ...

Okay someone told this was really bad and was so good! It reminded me of the summer when I started writing and how I always made the male character way ...

That was interesting! And you said "aircon" instead of air conditioner? And I liked the tone although I do beleive from the first paragraph its different, but I'm not sure. ...

Well over all this was good. Just please remember to indent. And "canon" I've never seen that word but I assumed you spelled it right, if you didn't mean "cannon". ...