Rydia

This one is really cute. Admittedly your rhyme an rhythm could have been better and it could have been longer but I like it and yes, snow is a wonderful ...

Thank you very much for the comments! I shall make a change or two...

Some of the imagery of this piece was nice and the theme of nature worked well but I felt that it could do with a more regular rhythm and I'd ...

This ones better, you're certainly getting there. The imagery is better and you're still lacking punctuation but any improvement is better than none so keep improving!

The imagery was really good in places and I think the best thing you can do with this is expand it. Add a deeper level of meaning too if you ...

I think you could have had more imagery but it has an interesting concept and it's quite well written so well done. The other suggestion I'd make is perhaps a ...

I agree with the others that you should work on the first. While the second is interesting, it's more of a riddle or something than a poem. As for the ...

I think this would be better if you kept the archaic theme going. Perhaps use treachery rather than lies and something in place of cried. Wept maybe. Just a suggestion ...

Some of your imagery in this poem is really nice and I like the extended metaphor of the guardian angel. Very good, a poem almost anyone can relate to and ...

Hi Jasmine! Let me see... Well I have to admit that it's a little short but it has a nice beat to it and the words flow together well. Simple ...

Thank you! We've just started this one and are currently working on it but if you want to read any of mine/our work just have a look at my profile. ...

It rings a bell in my memory but it'sbeen a good few years since I read any of pullman's books so I can't be certain. They are on my list ...

I love this poem. The language is very accurate, the rhyme and rhythm are perfect and basically I couldn't find a single mistake. It's often hard to write in such ...

Before I can really comment you need to write a lot more...

The movie is awesome and the books are even better. I hope that they make them all this time, including the magician's nephew because no one has attempted that one ...