Rydia

Thank you so much for the lovely feedback everyone! I have some ideas of how to finish this now and I can see that the content is at least vaguely ...

Two small suggestions - Apparently she looks just like me, but I don’t think I’ve ever looked that weak. [Describe her! Say something like ' She has my long, straggly ...

You can press the button by the door and I'll come," said Derik, getting of f the bed and brushing off the back of his suit. "Besides, I'm on a ...

Thank you so much everyone! Sureal - Thanks for the tips, I'll alter some of my speech tags and try to expand that section. Araidne - Good point. There was ...

Thanks KJ! And thank you, Azila, of course you can call me Kitty. Those are some really good points and I'm not going to make any changes just yet but ...

Thank you, Camille. Just to be clear, my descriptions of the characters were metaphorical, haha. They're just ordinary humans, I think someone's been reading too much fantasy ;) I made ...

Thank you for the comments everyone and for the criticism Jas and Gadi. Jasmine - Thank you. I'm glad you found my poem 'nice' haha. That fourth stanza needs some ...

Hello again, Suzie! Your second chapter is wonderful. The atmosphere you've built is perfect and the addition of Maude and Frankie is great. I feel so sorry for Frankie, poor ...

I'm not a huge fan either, it's just the one poem that I like and it's more for what it says than how it's written. I'd really like to have ...

No, he doesn't Claire. Not since the beginning of this year, guess he was either a second or third year. I suppose I shall never know who he was - ...

No comment XD Well actually, there is a comment. You have some great material here but maybe it could be presented better? With a bit more variety rather than the ...

*Moved to Other Fiction*

Sleeping valor - I'll start with the prologue though it might take me a bit of time (I've seen the length now) but I'll feel better reading the whole thing ...

*Moved to Other Poetry.*