Rydia

Thank you Audy! The Spanish is there because of Niebla being in chat at the time I was writing and me being stuck for inspiration. I should probably have added ...

Thank you magpie! I agreed with almost all of those changed and have edited accordingly. I think the only one I left out was the second comma after 'fish' in ...

It was for my poetry structures class, while I was still testing my tutor's sense of humour before I concluded he was a very solid guy. Even if he didn't ...

It makes wonderful sense and I will definitely consider playing with the line breaks more! Thank you so very much, dear

It makes wonderful sense and I will definitely consider playing with the line breaks more! Thank you so very much, dear

It makes wonderful sense and I will definitely consider playing with the line breaks more! Thank you so very much, dear

Thanks John! I almost called you Jocke then and from now on that shall be your nickname. It's good to know how a poem made someone feel so impressions are ...

The only rule is that you have to have at least three stanzas and you have to use the same words in ever stanza, but in any order. I've seen ...

Sorry about the bolding! Should have checked that first.

*Locked for plagiarism*

It's very good for English not being your first language! That's obviously not something I as a reviewer know coming to a poem, so I will generally judge all poetry ...

Thanks, dear! And don't worry about being late, I am seriously behind on my reviews at the moment so I totally know how that is. Hopefully I'll find some motivation ...

Thanks Pink! Some great feedback here, I think this is definitely one to have another look at some time soon. Thank you!

1. I think that will help, but I still think you need to make some changes to him. The reader has to connect with the narrator in the first chapter, ...

Thanks Noelle! You're right on the 'needing to rest' thing, I'll have to make a quick change there, but mould is actually mould in the UK ;) I know, silly ...