Rydia

Hi! Apologies for the delay, here I am to review :) Specifics 1. It was nice to see the princes so exited. Be careful with your word choice! There's rarely ...

Hi Toe! Sorry its taken me a while to review this, the poetry competition and work have had me rushed off my feet. But here I am now :) Specifics ...

Hi! Apologies for the delay, this week has been much crazier than I expected. Well, this month for that matter, but here I am now! Specifics 1. A quick typo ...

Hi, sorry about the delay! Hopefully the review will have been worth it :D Specifics 1. At the moment you're quite prosaic and I think this would benefit from playing ...

Hello, sorry about the delay! Specifics 1. Very strong opening! You've got a good use of repetition in 'little' and the sounds of your words are lovely. They build the ...

Hi again! I think this may be the last one for tonight :) Specifics 1. The girl's words don't match her actions. This is okay, but you should have more ...

Hello again! I liked this enough that I decided to review chapter two :D Specifics 1. This dialogue feels a little unrealistic, partly because of what I said before. He ...

Hi! I've been looking for a story to follow and if this holds my interest, maybe I'll read it all the way through ;) I'll probably wait as you post ...

Hi Toe! I've been surfing around for a poem to read and I almost passed this by because of the title. It's a bit bland and over-used, but I wavered ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! Specifics 1. The onomatopoeia is a tricky way to start the story - you leave your reader for too long without a visual and the audio ...

Hi! Specifics 1. Just a few quick pointers about your first lines: ..He feels the wind blowing in his face, he feels a rush of excitement in his body, he ...

Hi Trident! My apologies for being so late coming to this - I've had somewhat of a busy month. But here I am now and looking forward to what I ...

Hi Ari! I'm here to review as promised :) Specifics 1. I'd suggest removing the 'of' from the last line of the first stanza. It's breaking your flow and you ...

Hey Grif! I found this on my bookmarks and realised I hadn't left you any comments yet! Which is ridiculous, so here I am. 1. I think the opening feels ...

Hi, here I am to review as requested! Specifics 1. Most times, the mind adopts too many fictitious elements that make dreams evidently unrealistic. This would be smoother with 'which' ...