Rydia

Hey there again! No idea how long its been since I last reviewed a chapter of this but hopefully I can give a semi informed review :) Specifics 1. Some ...

Hi alliyah! I'm in a poetry mood so thought I'd take a look at this :) Specifics 1. Title - I like the idea of an escape that was unwanted ...

Hey there, welcome to the site! I thought I’d take a look at this… Specifics 1. Title – Melting Away is a slightly ordinary title. I’ve heard the phrase a ...

Hey there, thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. I think this has a very prosaic style to it which makes the flow a little slow and not ...

Hullo! I'll start with a few line by line comments and the try to give you some overall thoughts at the end... Specifics 1. I think you repeat 'ahead of ...

Hey there! I've not seen many pieces of writing in this kind of form before so I thought I'd take a look. Specifics 1. I'm not sure about starting with ...

Hello again! Sorry for the huge delay, I needed a bit of a break from reviewing but I'm back for review day! Specifics 1. Mason barks. A knife scrapes across ...

Hey there, hope you're having a good day! Specifics 1. I'm not sure about using 'sweet' as the descriptor for the song birds. I like the alliteration but I feel ...

Hey there, thought I'd take a look at this! Specifics 1. The first stanza feels like it's high on excess words and low on imagery - the only solid descriptor ...

Specifics 1. Effie keeps going back and forth from saying she feels nothing to this being ‘too sharp a pain to deal with’. I think you’re sending a few too ...

It’s weird to think I’m almost out of chapters! Specifics 1. I recognise the rap song as a Kanye West one just as I recognise Preston’s figure above me. I’ve ...

Hey there! Specifics 1. Interesting title - it's unusual and caught my attention so nice work there. 2. I don't think of stones as being hot, in fact quite the ...

I want cake but I already ate my cake and apparently you can't have your cake and eat it... Specifics 1. I think you need to give us some setting ...

Specifics 1. “What?” I finally ask. I heard what Dad said perfectly, but I need him to say it again so that I know my mind isn’t just playing some ...

Hello again! Specifics 1. It seems really odd that their mum left the house when their dad is the one having the affair. I'm not sure I'd have stuck around ...