Rydia

This poem is very well written. In fact, I couldn't find any mistakes at all which is unusual for me. The one thing I did notice is a slight lack ...

This isn't my usual sort of story and there wasn't a lot of action but it's well written and inserting the diary so that we can see Alexandrias real thoughts ...

I shall also add a crit. In general, I loved this and will certainly be looking out for more but your punctuation is off in a few places and there ...

The blue is nice and bright on mine but admittedly the orange is too close to yellow to stand out against it and it could do with something a little ...

I don't think the title really fits this poem. I actually found it rather blunt and if you are keeping it, the 'your' should be you're. Other than that, I ...

I liked this poem quite a lot but I have a few criticisms to make... First off, on the first line of the second stanza, it needs to be 'you're' ...

Very beautiful. Normally I would say that a script needs speech but this one is designed perfectly to be a silent movie. One suggestion is that perhaps if you shoot ...

Considering I don't know Pedro or the story that he's from, I found it very easy to understand the two characters. You're shakespearean dialect is a little out in places ...

Jimmy: Not me, my mom says I don’t have that much family, some weird thing happened I don’t know she doesn’t tell me much about it. Here I think you ...

First off I'd like to say well done because I know how hard it can be to write a villanelle and you've done a really good job. For me, the ...

I think the idea behind this poem is good and it has potential but I agree that your grammar needs improvement and your images could be stronger. I also picked ...

First off, I think that you should put your stage directions in bold or italics so that they are seperated from the dialect. Then I'd like you to add more ...

I think I'm going to do this one a paragraph at a time - The four sat in opposite corners, never quite knowing how exactly they had gotten there... I'm ...

I think that this poem started really well but then it got a little repetetive. I think that you can completely cut this stanza - Why cant you just feel ...

I felt that some of the language in this was nice but it was spoil by words such as 'till.' Why not just use 'until?' It sounds much better and ...