Rydia

Of Pigments and Protons A very unique, interesting title. Just thought I'd congratulate you on that. Its texture is ethereal and it tastes of Argon. As Noble gases react (clash, ...

Poor Kiera. I do hope someone comes to her rescue but then... I'm rather fond of Dominic. Must he be evil? Sigh. I suppose I shall have to be content ...

Your rhythm is a little out in places and it was rather simple but I liked this. You had a strong message throughout the poem and it has a lot ...

Lol. I love how casually you contemplate killing the young couple. I don't think it's necessary though; I'm not as bloodthirsty as Claudette. I like how you tied everything together ...

Wow. This was amazing Jiggity. You have a really strong skill in creating atmosphere; this whole piece felt really dark and eerie. Your characterisation in the first was really good ...

I'm intrigued. I should certainly like to see where you go with this. A very random start to what will most likely be a random tale... Oh and I like ...

This was certainly a lot clearer and easier to understand. A few suggestions - He was after her because s he had seen him kill his wife. The rain stopped ...

into a vacuum faraway. [Did you mean to write far away as 'faraway' or is that just a typo? Either way, I think it works better with the two words ...

This was a really good start. I take it the shadowed figure, the demon and infra are all the same? If so, use INFRA the whole time. I can see ...

This was really sweet, just a few suggestions - You have always, and to this day, [I don't like 'and to this day.' It doesn't quite fit.] encouraged me to ...

This one is much better than the other two you've written but you repeat 'Mom' a little too often and this could be edited to create a shorter poem with ...

First, here are some changes I would make that relate to grammar, spelling and structure - When we were together , I felt like I was a princess. [s]But[/s] T ...

My first suggestion is that you go and read other people's work and leave them a critique. This should help solve two problems - 1. We have a general rule ...

You could probably find someone to sing this but, to be honest, it's too repetitive and over dramatic for me. There are so many songs out there with the same ...

Just the one suggestin for this part - Seden and Kiera sat down on Kiera's sleeping mallet, leaning against her cloth-covered walls. [Mallet? I don't think that's the right word. ...