Rydia

Hi there! First off, I'd like to say that this has a lot of potential but it does need some improvement. At first, I was disapointed by a lack of ...

Loved it dear. A very romantic, delightful chapter and I'm starting to see some similarities between Annie and her sister. That's a good thing. They were a touch too diverse ...

My first impression of this is I like it but there's room for improvement. There again, when isn't there? Again, a very simple poem and you should probably add more ...

Hi Claudette, I haven't read the book but I can give you some general pointers on structure and such - From Caleb’s childhood he’s mean to his brother, but not ...

Awww, that's really sweet. You have a really nice, simple poem here and I love the message behind it. If you want to improve it, perhaps try to use some ...

I love this Sohini! A very unique twist on the 'I'm writing a poem about writing a poem' theme. In fact, I didn't even realise that was what you was ...

A few specific points first and then I shall make some general comments - She wasn’t pretty, but [s]in[/s] popularity, well, she had that in spades. It wasn’t fair to ...

You are getting negligent my friend but can I blame you? At 100 it must be very difficult to avoid typos and such. Here's what I found - He stopped ...

I liked this chapter. I'll admit that you could have spent longer on the conflict with the other ship and more description would be nice but it's a pretty good ...

The descriptions in this are pleasant and I like your general theme and the extended metaphor. However, it has some grammatical errors but they shouldn't be hard to clear up. ...

My first impression of this is that I like it but it should be more regular. You started off really well with some strong, regular rhymes and an almost regular ...

Oh no, poor Gladman! You can't leave it there, I want to know if he gets eaten! I wasn't expecting Tempo to return to be honest so that was a ...

This is brilliant and it was really clever of you to write from someone else's point of view. I have to agree that I was confused as to whether they ...

This is a touch over dramatic, especially at the beginning but it's not a bad story. In general you should add some more description and expand it. As for some ...

I think you meant to use 'revealing' on the second line of the second stanza but feel free to correct me if I'm wrong. As for the poem, I think ...