Royboy

Gracias, merci, thank you. I messed around with the wording in some places and took your suggestions. I'm glad you all like it. I was expecting a totaly bored reaction, ...

Dija rewrite it? I'm just concidering reading it or not seeing as how there's nothing else to do. lol. Tell me if you post anything past where I left off.

I didn't enjoy the movie as much as the books, although I think they did a pretty decent job on it. There were some things that i forgot about the ...

Yes... She would have. Thanks, Clau. I've tried to go back plenty of times. I think either I don't have enough will power to retype the entire thing or I ...

Ah, I should have seen it. She's only obsessed with it because you're in love with it as well! lol my dad's a car dealer, so he's probably driven one ...

The trauntler WOULd scuttle.... I don't mean to be a retard about it, but he doesn't fly as much as he scuttles/walks around. And he was refering to him and ...

Andi! I know I said not to rush, but will you post what comes after the flashback with Jack on the kitchen floor?... Uh.... wow that sounded weird... lmao. but ...

Thanks =] but It's much better than it was before, due to everyone helping me out. It was a DISASTER! You should have seen it!

.... shut up. you're making me feel like a retard. The emo/screamo thing is different, though. On the paper it says emo and you crossed it out to write screamo. ...

Yeah. I mean, Alli was kinda hard to write. I really wanted to make her look all poised and everything at first, but once she was shoved into a situation ...

Thanks! Impressions are welcome too. I mean if you don't feel like doing a full crit, you can just say what you think of the characters so that I can ...

*swallows pride and uses mad's suggestions.* Thanks, though. I got full points on it! I'm glad I put it through here first, you guys really helped me get my act ...

dude. click post reply not new topic. k?

If you want any crits, you have to use paragraphs. start a new paragraph every time someone different speaks or the subject changes. Then pm me and tell me to ...

Thank you, but I can't take other people's work. I have a thing with that. =/ I was looking for other people's suggestions and thoughts as to how they would ...