Royboy

I'd like you to kill "Tom". Death by drowning in tears of laughter? Of course, only if you want to. Loved the death by donkey. Haha.

Cool. =] Thanks you, guys. I'll think about adding more emotional detail later. Maybe when I have more than two minutes before I go to sleep. As I mentioned, I'll ...

Who might the author be?

Oh, jeezie, you guys. WHY would I do that? Anyway, thanks for the imput. I've gone back to fix it up. I'm only on because I have an extra few ...

Thanks for the imput. I've only got a little time after my computer class to be writing this, so I went and I fixed it up. Next chapter should be ...

Oh, yes please post one chapter at a time. And double space your paragraphs. THEN you'll get actual critiques.

Oops, my bad. This was about double what it is now, but then I realized that the entire beginning was a load of crap. XD So there's a bit I ...

Stirly, I'm so sorry. I probably should have thought of that, and I'm thoroughly embarrassed that I didn't. I hope I didn't offend you in any way. Also, If you ...

It won't let me modify! The stupid screen keeps skipping. Well, thanks so much. I deleted that post informing you I was going for a nap, as it was pointless.... ...

Haha, yeah. That makes so much more sense. It just seemed like it fit the criteria for your own contest in a general kind of way. Which contest would you ...

Is a single sentence of forshadowing enough, or do I have to rewrite this? If it's only one chapter that's like this, will it really make that big of a ...

Yeah, I appologize. Hehe. It gets not-so-perfect in a bit, but I just wanted to show how it was an ideal life with a loving family and everything. Will you ...

Oh, thanks so much! I love it when people attack my writing. Haha, I'm not being sarcastic. And I've had that happed to me three times on the same crit. ...

I like them both. I already told you to go listen to Sand in my Shoes, but you never said if that was about the tempo of Riverlight. Have you ...