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Sadly, I agree with King. You did break the rules of the site. The basic needs for story posting are 2 reviews=1 post. Story-wise, this piece is an excellent creative ...

This piece is astoundingly beautiful. I'll do the bad stuff and then the good. Bad: 1. The first stanza is a bit...detached from the rest of the poem. What I ...

Oh my goodness! This was one of the most heart-wrenching stories I've ever read. I could relate to the MC, feel her frustration and anger. Jordy is just one of ...

This is extremely good. I didn't count the syllables, but mostly focused on the structure and word choice. #3, I think you should write instead of being lazy because you ...

This is very good, but you could describe the characters more. Also, try to make up your own names and characters because Frodo made me think of LotR. Some of ...

Very, very interesting plot! I'm going to have a word with the contest host guy if you don't win! :wink: The character's motives were very, very clear. However, I think ...

These lyrics are pretty good, but they seem pretty on the surface. I want you to bring up memories. Of the cold verse, say "Remember when you used to bring ...

Good storyline, but the dialogue is not realistic. It sounds very cliche and actually a little bit boring, if you want the truth. And you don't give enough directions to ...

Okay, basically EVERYONE here has covered the grammar and spelling and all that stuff, so I'll just take care of the rest. I love the simplicity of the poem, but ...

This is good. I just have a couple of things to say: 1. Her golden curls retracted as her shady figure droppled nearly dead onto the loveseat. I think it ...

This is good, but elaborate on the boy. Why is she staring at him so much? Is Carver English because he used Brit slang and if not then take "batty" ...

This was very well-written. The descriptions are so clear I feel like I'm here with the character. "My hair stuck to my face like plaster tangling in front of my ...

Oh, my goodness! This was very heart-wrenching! I loved your choice of words--they seem to make the emotion flow through your poem, which I don't see a lot on here. ...

This is a beautiful poem. However, I'm a bit puzzled at the meaning behind it. Are you talking about a boyfriend, a son, a cousin? I think a deeper dig ...

Oh my God. I have experienced writing mood SO many times. I get kicked off the computer when an idea just pops up. Honestly, my dad sets a limit for ...