RoseTulipLily

An okay story, I'll admit. My only critic is that instead of saying,"He knew he wasn’t supposed to go by that particular street. Jackson Cane had been repeatedly warned not ...

I don't have much of a proboem with the dialogue here. To me, it seemed to fit nicely, although you could have incorporated more of Siren's emotions as she was ...

Poor Kou. Being on the run all the time is bound to affect someone physically and especially psychologically. Death certainly follows the death mage, and watching good people like Rim ...

Rim's death was very emotional for me, just as it was for Kou. Even if we hadn't known him long, his death was easy to be distressed by. He wasn't ...

Aside from some errors like Yuriiko pointed out, I enjoyed this story. It was easy to feel Enola's turmoil and pain about Adella. It's clear that their bond is very ...

Aside from some errors like Yuriiko pointed out, I enjoyed this story. It was easy to feel Enola's turmoil and pain about Adella. It's clear that their bond is very ...

Short indeed, but sweet. It's interesting how you manage to squeeze in good character development in such a short time. Cortex came across as very mysterious from her introduction and ...

I'm impressed with your use of imagery here. Even if it did particularly scare me, I did very much feel like I was in the shoes of the character which ...

So I'm inclined to agree with others who say this was a bit too short. Granted, it's a short story for a reason but still. You're good at imagery, as ...

Thank you for your review. I'll definitely keep your advice in mind :)

Thank you for the review. I actually wrote this based on what happened to me in real life so I think that helped make it more relatable

Thank you for the review. I actually wrote it from my own perspective about my unborn brother so I think that helped in making it be more relatable. As for ...

Oh gosh, this was beautiful. You describes us readers perfectly. Reading is an important part of our lives and personalities. Hence us being called readers and you really captured that ...

Thank you! Poetry isn't really my thing, but I like to try it sometimes and I appreciate your kind words. You're right; we never write the way we speak. Otherwise, ...

First Ariel, now Cinderella. I'm very eager to see who's next