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I'm not sure I ever do talk about age here. I do hint that Nikki and Ivy are the same age, and that Grey, maybe seventeen, is a bit younger. ...

I'm aware of some cultures that practice cannibalism for religious reasons, but that doesn't mean it's not still globally taboo. Basically 99.9% of everyone agrees that Cannibalism Is Bad. And ...

Yeah! Sorry for the misunderstanding. These two have had pretty extensive social interactions. They're both main characters. I'm switching POVs almost ever chapter. You did come in on chapter thirty, ...

I think there's space for both telling and showing. If I actually showed the entire conversation, there'd be an entire chapter's worth of information that isn't important to the plot. ...

Ivy had a nightmare; something bad happened in her past? Grey had to steal some bread; he must be poorer than I'd realised (I figured Alder would feed him, but ...

Thanks for your re iews, bisc! You've been pointing out some things I've frankly forgotten about now I'm at chapter 30. There'll be a ton of revising that needs to ...

The last point you made is what I'm hoping will work! Thankns so much for the review!

Hey thanks for the review and your kind words! So what I was trying to get at in this poem was not so much existentialism in death, but rather the ...

ah, a wonderful homage to my current favorite meme

for that part you quoted, it was the second thing, that deep down he really does care for Alder. Thanks for the review!

ellipses can be used to indicate a trailing-off pause, especially in dialogue.

you know, stealing is a part of real life and a part if the character and plot. I can't just take out parts of the story that "aren't nice". and ...

Will BBC Code really work within YWS's text editor in the publishing center? I always thought you either had to upload the picture or else just link to it because ...

hehehehehehe (@ the title thing) I thought about that too with the whole alder deal. his character is gonna need some more thought and reworking in future revisions. maybe in ...

how about if I format it like this? thanks for the review!