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So the first thing with the visual disruption was actually a part of the style, jsyk. ^^ The part you were confused about was actually referring to the city. The ...

This hits me right in the "I DON'T WANT TO TURN 18 NEXT YEAR" gland ;-; very nice.

This has a different sort of tone than yours usually have. I like it, though I can't put my finger on what it is. I appreciate the Hills Like White ...

each stanza is its own separate image or thought, but the final word of one stanza is the first word of the second, so they tie together in that regard. ...

I think what I was going for with that particular part was, while I can't see the blades turn in the dark, I know that they do. Thanks for the ...

I feel like your whole "test" here was to get people to comment and then reply with cute little comments. haha

oh, and thank you for the review! :D

This was an experiment with more abstract poetry. I've been experimenting with this for a while, and I haven't had a lot of success, but I did like this poem. ...

"ballpoints" refer pretty much exclusively to pens. I've never heard that term describe anything else. I didn't want to use punctuation in this (aside from the ellipsis and such that ...

Progressing and trying to progress is always good. Keep it up!

childhood is exactly right. It's what I was referring to with my "even then." This is a narrator reflecting on this time. Even when we're young, we still build up ...

Hey, I asked strange if I could and he said yes. I know about the thing in chat lol

Hello! Interesting images. I'm thinking about a Rorschach test. So I know a big part of this poem is that the narrator doesn't know what these things are, but you'll ...

ooooh That was another thing. I was going to suggest a question mark there. Also, I think it would be clearer if you gave some sort of emphasis to those ...

Oh no, there's certainly no harm in posting it here. And I understand your sentiments. I was just trying to give you as much writing advice as could be warranted ...