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Re: 10 pm
All of the capitalization was VERY intentional. If you'll notice, everything "wrongly" capitalized" is a bigger concept than it appears if I had not capitalized it. It makes the abstract ...
Dec 22, 2016 -
Re: 10 pm
All of the capitalization was VERY intentional. If you'll notice, everything "wrongly" capitalized" is a bigger concept than it appears if I had not capitalized it. It makes the abstract ...
Dec 22, 2016 -
Re: but the fire underneath of things
Most of what you were confused about is just poetic devices. The part about the too-hot coat turning into melting skin is juxtaposition and irony smoogled together. The backpedaling is ...
Nov 22, 2016 -
Re: but the fire underneath of things
The first line is supposed to continue the sentence the title started. hard to see that sometimes with all the info stuff in the way. I def want to be ...
Nov 20, 2016 -
Re: The Death of The Artist as a Desperate Young Boy
dang this poem is so raw. It makes me ache. Really good poem, but I'm worried for the author. Take care. Your poetry is amazing, as are you.
Oct 6, 2016 -
Re: Biblical Cooking Show
This was supposed to be under 1.5 minutes for the monologue, so adding more stories wouldn't have been good. Plus I tried writing this earlier and I had a bunch ...
Sep 5, 2016 -
Re: Biblical Cooking Show
This was supposed to be under 1.5 minutes for the monologue, so adding more stories wouldn't have been good. Plus I tried writing this earlier and I had a bunch ...
Sep 5, 2016 -
Re: Biblical Cooking Show
you get the reign of the judges joke??? Where have you read/heard about that? and this was a monologue, so other characters etc. are a no go, and I did ...
Sep 5, 2016 -
Re: a background of blood blossoms
excellence refined into poetic form.
Aug 24, 2016 -
Re: snowglobe -edited-
yes! it's a lot more focused. excellent editing!
Aug 23, 2016 -
Re: License Plates
yo btw when I went to the historical state penitentiary they talked a little bit about this and I was like, "hey! I actually knew this!"
Aug 1, 2016 -
Re: outside with friends
also, a line break might denote a pause, but enjambment is totes a cool thing that more people should do! I thought your line breaks were fine!
Jul 22, 2016 -
Re: License Plates
really and for serious? could I see a source so I could read more about it?
Jul 22, 2016 -
Re: even our traces forgot our names and eyes
hey thanks for the review! I'll agree that this wasn't the most cohesive poem I've written, probably because I tried to mush two poems together. I'll try to follow your ...
Jul 1, 2016 -
Re: Dirty Laundry
Ugh don't air your dirty laundry on YWS. jkjk beautiful poem mags
Jun 6, 2016