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Re: To Mom
I really liked the poem. Especially the revelation at the end. I actually thought that it was your mother that had died not you. Your voice in it is really ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: Boulevard of life
Awh! I really liked your poem. There seems to be so many words in it, its cluttered. I't shouldn't be. I know you are going through a journey writing this ...
Oct 22, 2011 -
Re: To my best friend, it's ok to be a sunflower
Hi Tranquility! :) I loved your poem so much. The structure, rhythm and rhyme was perfect as well as the language :). A brilliant poem which I'm sure many teenagers ...
Apr 30, 2010 -
Re: A Kiss in Shape of a Shiver
Hey I liked this poem! :) thats why I chose to critique it :) Saying that I still have a few complaints to make :wink: The wind sent you a ...
Apr 27, 2010 -
Re: The Folders Of Life
That's actually brlliant! There was one part which was a little sticky and didn't flow brilliantl then you’re love sick and ill. would when not be a better choice here ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: We Fall Upon Deaf Ears
Hey I like the oem :)! How long did it take you to write it though? Or did you just get an inspiration? :) Truly, we are ignored Often we ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: Unbalanced
Hey I loved it! Maybe it's because I am a chemistry student myself! But, yeah its really great! I think you were being slightly modest when you said it's probably ...
Apr 25, 2010 -
Re: A story that I am writing that currently has no name Pt 1.
Morcant hurried through the woods, keeping his eyes on his prey. It ran some ten yards ahead of him, its paws thumping on the ground and its tail wagging in ...
Aug 24, 2009 -
Re: Requiem
I want to read more! :D What happens next ? Are you writing more to this! It's a great idea! It reminded me somewhat like the film the island. Do ...
Jul 6, 2009 -
Re: Honestly Ugly
Hey I read both poems, and honestly , I disagree with what everybody else said! I actually prefered the first version of the poem. I liked the way that it ...
Jul 5, 2009 -
Re: Blue
Hey great poem< i couldn't find much fault with it :D The deepest ocean; The clearest sky. A soaring eagle flying high. Nice stanza :wink: Faded denim trudging the sand; ...
Jul 4, 2009 -
Re: High School Students
Is this supposed to be a poem?:smt101 Why are high school students are crazy? Are they picking on a nerd or are they caught up in being popular? Do they ...
May 27, 2009 -
Re: I Held Time in my Hands
Hey, You asked me to critique this poem ages ago, I really didn't get the time to do this :wink: until now :D I think the cocept is great, the ...
May 27, 2009 -
Re: Harry Potter and the Philosopher's Stone... and Lillie
Hey This was auch a good idea:D The only problem with redoing this is that J.K. Rowling is such a good writer that you are obviously going to be compared ...
May 27, 2009 -
Re: Angalcia: PROLOGUE
Hey :D From this piece I have gathered that the girl in the story is from a poor/not so wealthy background. I think that you should make this more obvious ...
May 27, 2009
