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  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Our Stop

    I love it. The dejected, underlying feeling of sadness and hopelessness is subtle yet so obvious. I'm very new to the world of poetry, but I can say I agree ...

    Nov 25, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Hidden

    Since you reviewed one of my poems, I'm going to review one of yours! Since yours was so in-depth, I'm going to make this concise. There's not much to review, ...

    Oct 7, 2011
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: Friends

    It's a cute poem. Your writing is nice, and I think it kind of goes over what needs to be said without being too wordy which would be obnoxious for ...

    Oct 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: No one knew

    I like it, a lot. I love the ending! Powerful and moving. I'm thinking that the transition between talking about the flower and yourself is a little weak. Maybe go ...

    Oct 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Walls

    I have to admit, I had no idea it was about sex either. Maybe you could insert words that kind of bring that forth more. The "Why can't he play?" ...

    Oct 5, 2011
  • Poetry » Dramatic, General Re: Listen

    This is seriously one of the best things I have ever read on this site. This is CRAZY good. Your tone is perfect, your words are perfect, everything is perfect. ...

    Oct 3, 2011
  • Poetry » Lyrical, General Re: Innocent Childhood...

    Hey! I really like this, I can really relate to what you're trying to say. I love the stanzas that rhyme, I think it flows nicely. Even when the poem ...

    Oct 3, 2011
  • Novel / Chapter » Romantic, General Re: Blue Eyes Don't Lie (3)

    Hey! First, to start off, it's a cute story. I've read some previous chapters and they were fun. So, yeah! "He was balding, and was chubby." Here you could just ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Novel / Chapter » Fantasy, General Re: Message in the Stars Part 1

    Hey. Thanks for the review!:) I like this a lot! It has a nice flow and it's adorable. Maybe try to be a little more descriptive with the scene to ...

    May 23, 2010
  • Short Story » Science Fiction, General Re: Fission - [Edited]

    Hey! Thanks for the review. This is a really cool idea. Expect the unexpected is the motto of my existence. I don't know if you need to put "Expect the ...

    Nov 23, 2009
  • Poetry » Narrative, General Re: Blood Lust

    I really really liked this poem. It made me feel as if I were you... I'm a girl. That's awkward. Haha. No, really. My favorite line was, "Your hair carries ...

    Jul 23, 2009
  • Poetry » Other, General Re: me, myself and I

    Hey! I really liked your poem! I was pleasantly surprised I must say. I loved that glass wall line. Somewhat cliche, but nice. I also enjoyed the ending line. I ...

    Jul 23, 2009


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