River

Hello! My name is River and I'll be reviewing you today! Okay lets begin with your capitalization, although it dosent break a rule of any kind, I feel that it ...

Actually this was written in approx. five minutes lol. And most of my poetry is vauge, the vaugeness allows the reader to better connect with their own experiences. It also ...

Thanks for the review! I'm trying to take the story slowly because I feel like rushing things like character description is a problem for me and many other young writers. ...

Hmm. Okay, positive first. I really enjoyed the way you described the brother's new friends and also the last sentance of the piece "A silence that would build and wait ...

Incredible! Mysterious and blunt in a good way. I think the story could have been told better from a first person view, but some people don't write as well in ...

I don't understand exactly how this is a poem and It sounds like a story that I haven't heard. I might be a nice story though.

I liked how you potrayed Rivers. That character made the story worth reading to me. My only critisims are that the story seemed a bit rushed. Just my opinion.

A dark poem, wonderfully written. The symbolism is perfect as far as I am concerned. It reminds me of the book "The Thirteenth Tale" by Diane Setterfield.

Passionate and...your love and devotion for your sister is something I wish everyone was capable of. The poem was flawless. Congratulations.

I like the meaning and all but I felt it wasn't very...poetic. You had a good idea but I didn't feel like the best writing went into it.

A good depiction of a solider's last moments. I hate to watch war movies where sombody is shot and it dosen't seem to matter, the memory your solider gives is ...

Really great and discriptive. I am a Christian and I love the way that you expressed Jesus's emotions. Alot of people sometimes forget that he had them, I think.

A bit strange. No offense. I felt it was a bit rushed and perhaps more characters could have been put in. Also I am A bit confused after reading it. ...

This poem is awsome! If only it were longer :( It remindes me of what Shakesphere said about the world being a stage and all of that. This is really, ...

It paints a nice picture for sure, I felt it could've been more personal, more emotional. But it isn't bad at all!