Ringo_rules987

I agree with Kylan that this is a unique concept, and even though I'm a bit against the concept of organized religion altogether, it makes for a good poem. However, ...

I can't say there was anything that.. I don't know, amazing about it. It wasn't as bad as many poems I've read on other forums, but you tell us everything, ...

Eep, well it's going to be odd critiquing an epic novelist, considering how low I am on the YWS food chain. But on to the poem... Well it's not bad, ...

I really didn't like much of anything about it, to be honest. First off, the title is a real clunker. It's not really anything imaginative, but I can see people ...

Normally I don't critique fiction, as my knowledge of the subject is not very extensive, but you had no comments! I had to give you something to think about. Unfortunately ...

You seem to stamp out these poems while putting little thought into them. You left nothing for us to think about, you just told us everything. A big part of ...

Conceptually the poem was good. I can feel a certain amount of emotion, but not much when I put it in retrospect, so build on all of that. Like pieman ...

Sometimes more meaningful things can be said in a single word than in a novel several inches thick. I did really enjoy reading this, and the difficulty level of executing ...

Anger is orange. It smells like smoke, choking and dry. It tastes like hot coal, burning and bitter. It sounds like a sonic boom, loud and deafening. And it feels ...

When writing narrative poetry, the rule about speaking to someone stays the same as writing a piece of fiction. I need you She said He said nothing But they both ...

I like the way you started the poem with that first line. Your eyes don’t sparkle like a star, glistening in a night sky. Your smile doesn’t light up a ...

I cannot let any poem be left without a critique! Now about the poem: I see her twinkling lights across the dark wine sea; Istanbul, you’re so cool. "You're so ...

This was very, very good. I have trouble saying anything negative about. What I enjoyed in particular about it was the unique representation of something so common. Describing the sun's ...

*sighs*, I envy your skill and ability. The diversity was great without being a jumbled mess, which is a very difficult thing to accomplish. It's a very contemplative poem, and ...

Repetition, when used wisely and with subtlety, can tie a poem together and help rhythm in a great way, but the idea of using the same line for each stanza ...