Riedawriter23

Great edits Andy. And I really like the new name. I can really sense the feeling you added. I'm actually sorry for her and yet excited. What is she going ...

This was really nice. Nice analogies within the lines and descriptive words. I liked each line and found they had there own meaning separately. Good job! Keep it up! -Rieda

I liked both. They were each very simple and affective. There wasn't too much or too little and you got the point across in very flowly descriptive yet simple and ...

Very interesting. I liked the dialog you put in. It could use some spelling edits but otherwise I found this very affective. Good job. Keep at it! -Rieda

lol, I guess that since I get it now that's pretty clever! -Rieda

lol I really liked this. That is exactly how I felt. Great points on passion for the poem and connecting with your readers.

I have to admit that this a really great beggining to a "story" but not a Narritive poem. You might want to consider moving this to the correct forum as ...

I really liked the meaning of this poem. It was short, but far from simple, it really made me think and I enjoyed how much you put into so little ...

Ha! I loved this! Very interesting and very clean with great descriptions. Awesome job on the whole thing I had a fun time reading about Buddha. lol. Keep at it! ...

This was really nice as a short poem. When I first saw it I thought that it possible wasn't going to have enough but after reading through it had just ...

This is so beautiful. I love the flow and the rhyming that appears at the perfect moments. I can't find anything wrong with it, which is also a great sign, ...

Really beautiful word usage. I loved how the lines were played out, the grammar and spelling were alright as others have already commented on, but altogether, I loved this. Keep ...

I liked the way the words were presented and the way you left some lines short, though some lines could be longer to give the poem more body. This was ...

This was wonderful. There wasn't a moment it was off flow and the analogies were perfect. I also loved the scence you showed throughout. Really nice!! Keep at it! -Rieda

lol, of course I don't mind fshr, you didn't have to ask. I was actually hoping to see the master at work, esspecially in this era, I've been waiting for ...