Riedawriter23

Holy crap she was fast! Good beginning. I paused to catch my breath, Period here at the speed she was going, she was long gone by now. When I turned ...

First of all, this was so sweet. I got teary-eyed myself as I read it. Now the crit. :) I shook me head as a sudden thought appeared in my ...

For your first, first person piece this was really great, Clau. It had a lot of emotion involved and even if you hadn't told me I would have guessed that ...

I think the beginning was really awesome. I liked the double personality of Quinn it was very interesting and that part inside of me was yelling "Just kill him!" Of ...

I think that altogether this poem is nice. When you read over it once it seems really beautiful and simple but I do think the the last line needs to ...

I really liked this. I think the whole way that it was described was beautiful and I was left with feeling at the end. It's just such an almost cliche ...

Whoa 8s. That was certainly...deep. Okay as far as language is concerned you did an awesome job. Nice use of italics. It was a little more than a bit suggestive ...

Wow, this was really deep, Linds. There was a lot of feeling coming from the poem so that it didn't need any kind of rhyme or anything. It's fine the ...

um, beautiful words but I don't think I understand any of them. It seems like it should be simple considering your title and your ending...but it isn't. Every where you ...

...whoa. Okay, I really wasn't expecting a full sex scene between Tea and Eolen, especially when Jared just got home...wow. Lol, great writing though. I can really see the love ...

I love her behavior in this. You're excellent at female prospectives. lol. I could really imagine that as a diary entry on a cell phone. Very well written. I WAS ...

8s …whoa, so Alex and Quinn…And then…That was a lot that happened! Jacob should fall and die. I’m shocked really. I hadn’t expected so much in so little time! That ...

Yes this was very sweet. I agree with Snoink though. That stanza should go. It does nothing for the poem but mess with the rhyme a bit. You're laying on ...

I liked the whole poem. It really flowed nicely for me. I've always loved the simple poems that have a lot of meaning. The only part that through me off ...

Altogether, it's alright. I don't really get the point of it all though. There were too many focuses and not enough detail on each I think. And the title didn't ...