Riedawriter23

Both Sunshine and Lena are awesome. My favorite part was when Lena was like are you eating lube? I couldn't stop laughing. She's a very interesting character, afraid to say ...

XD I really liked this. Your characters really shown through. I liked the tension of the characters throughout it but most of all...I loved Lena! :) She had some really ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) The first thing that I noticed was your title. Take out the apostrophe before the s. It should just be He loves her. HE LOVES ...

Hello! :) The layout of this story should really be spaced out, it's painful to the eyes this way. Edit that first or else people might just look past this ...

Hello! :) This was really good for a rhyming poem. I feel that it would do much better if it didn't rhyme though...you know? I focused too much on the ...

Hello! :) I think that this was a good idea. The titles was really good and the concept was really nice but you didn't put into it your full potential. ...

Hello. :) One thing I noticed was no punctuation. Though I only noticed it after reading the entire poem and looking back at it. I think you can easily add ...

XD I love it. It's so bad that it's...almost really good! 0.0 If that makes sense. Maybe that was the point? :P That's rad. I did it for all the ...

Hello! :) That first night, I took a risk. I went to that place, warily, seeking, not knowing what I'd find. **This starts off confusing because I have no view ...

Hello! :) Firstly, I don't consider this poetry, especially dramatic poetry. If anything this belongs in the Romantic Fiction section so I'll ask a poetry mod about moving this. You ...

Hello! :) What really got to me in this poem was how you put out your lines. I couldn't concentrate on the content of your poem because I was having ...

Hello! :) Welcome to YWS! Okay, the first thing that I noticed was the way you structured your lines. It made it sort of difficult to read. It can do ...

Hello! :) I really enjoyed this. It was short and beautiful, you said a lot in just a few words. Oh attractive shadow, how your cool blue hues tempt me. ...

Hello! :) I do think that this has potential. What I think you need to work on however is your punctuation. And also, realize that poems about the Titanic have ...

Hello, welcome to YWS! :) Firstly, I must say that this was very difficult to read in the format that you put it in. Try to form it more so ...