Renard

Heggo! XD This is a great piece. The use of the first person makes it seem more attainable in terms of relatability. eg. 'I was swimming, swimming away from my ...

Heya! You have a very individual writing style. I got used to it quickly and it became familiar to read which was nice. 'the next...' these are probably just typos, ...

heggo! XD This work is really harsh: 'I can only love you when I'm intoxicated and you don't say much' I mean, I love the expression but still... it sounds ...

Heggo! XD 'Their main goal, of course to be Sex.' Not only is this a very bold claim, it is also grammatically inaccurate. I think. XD Or it just doesn't ...

Heggo! There are some very miserable overtones in this work. XD (In a nice way) 'You still linger in this house, this empty, broken place where I used to be ...

Hey! XD 'I like me I hate me I create a better, fake me' You have got it. In these few lines you have epitomised how I feel about being ...

Hey! XD You have a great character here. 'She points out innuendo, Wears leather jackets too,' Something tells me this is very personal. And I love that. You've put your ...

Heggo. XD I am intrigued to see what this is about with Valentine's Day so close, here we go... girls should smell like roses and chocolate - interesting opening statement, ...

Hey! XD Another short work. So I will take this line by line. :) 'In the day, I become her.' - The them of transition here is a lovely idea. ...

Hey! I find the ideas you write about in this work, rather contradictory to those which are connotated with your title: 'Take me from this cruel place.' It's not clear ...

For a prologue, this is really long. And there is enough detail in it to make it a first chapter I would say. I would like to see you develop ...

Ok, so I find this work very confusing. After reading and re-reading the piece, I still have absolutely no idea what the place you are referring to actually is. And ...

Hey! You have a very traditional voice in this work; 'That got her. “I...I don't know what you are talking about.”' but it helps make your style more your own. ...

I like what you've written here. But it is definitely in need of some formatting. The lines are all jammed in together and this makes it difficult to read. Which ...

This is really short, but really cool. I feel like you could develop it and make much more... I don't wanna say interesting, but you know... like scary. Put the ...