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I felt the opposite way that Kepe did about the whole "I'm a ninja" bit. It felt silly in an unnecessary way. You have some very nice descriptive details at ...

I have one problem with this poem in the way it sounds. Yes, it does need some visuals, you know, "Show, don't tell." But what stood out for me is ...

It certainly does not suck by any means. However, it could use some work. Throughout the story it was never clear if it was werewolves or vampires. I'd want a ...

It's a very rare day that Brad (Incan) and I agree, but I am with him on this one. If you want to write a poem with this theme, forget ...

Busboys is right. I'm not going to critique this as a writer because I know the kind of place it's coming from. To want to be with someone who doesn't ...

Gorgeous! Simply gorgeous. We all have to have a special place to hide, something magical to believe in. Everyone accepts it when children believe it those things. We're supposed to ...

I'm afarid I'm with pickle on this. In the space of about three pages, you've got a birthday (and we don't even know how old she has just turned) her ...

Yeah, certainly a fun song. I have no ear for music, so I really can't imagine how this will sound. With a little restructuing, it would work as a poem ...

This seemed to be missing a lot, like it was a piece out of a much larger story, but you don't know much about the story it came out of. ...

Regretably, I don't have time to read this, but I do have one suggestion regarding your title. It needs to be easier to read. I know in fanatsy we like ...

I'm not so sure of how I feel about this one. Maybe that's why this would work better has a longer story. It would make the transition from sad/nostaligic to ...

The line about going part time did seem like she was going to work part time to me as well. That should probably have been more clear. It certainly is ...

I also thought there was no substance in this. What were you trying to get across with this poem? Since there was not much emotion in it, I was expecting ...

Personally, I didn't love Valentines Day even when I was in a relationship (which ended a few weeks ago). He was always more interested in doing something than I was. ...

It is pretty sad that a society that is supposed to be about freedom of speech can try to punish people for simply exercising that right. What is even sadder ...