Redbox275

I enjoyed this. I think it could make a really good story. First, what think you can improve and add is transition. We would be at one scene or setting ...

Hey their I'm Redbox275 or Red as they call me. I see you are a fresh new member to YWS. Wellcome and we are glad to have you here. Okay ...

What are you talking about? I think this was well written. For one your descriptions are great. They paint a clear picture using refreshing phrases. Some I like are.... "tunnelling ...

I really enjoyed reading this chapter! It was a good idea to write it in Tish's poiint of view. So what I found interesting about this chapter is that you ...

I've been checking out your work. Overall it's good. Your descriptions are great and your writing style is going on the right track. Although, you sometimes make your characters act ...

Hello Red her for the review, Your story got me invested but there is a lot of feedback so let's get started. First would like to point out there is ...

Hello Chaser, First off good descriptions. I like the metephors and I think it drew a pretty good picture without making me think I've read this phrase a million times ...

Red here for a full on review. There is a few things I noticed about this story and there is something very important missing, A GOAL FOR YOUR MAIN CHARACTER.You ...

Hello I am back. So Luke and Lavender our siblings what a concidence! First off, I guess I should've told you earlier but a few chapters back you changed it ...

I am commenting so late because I'm going to review later? More inner monologue. How does the character feel? What she thinking about what just happened? I want more insight ...

If I were Tish I would be very happy to get this letter. For a letter, it is written very well. The grammer has very little errors and everything transitions ...

Hello Redbox here, Good job with your story! Although, I see a long way to go. Writng wise you gave me a clear picture of what is going on and ...

Hey there PerksOfBeingAReader, That was really sweet what you wrote to your senior friends. It's always good to appreciate other although...... it wasn't a story or narritive. It seemed at ...

Hello Red here ready to review! So....superheroes. It's been done a lot of times before but hopefully you can add something new. After reading this I don't see a cliche ...

Hello iLikeToWriteStuff, Okay the first thing I liked when reading this story was the first paragraph. The character had a good voice and it was a good hook. The reader ...