RayquazaKid

Hey there. :) Did ignored her Shouldn’t that be Dad? We all know that you were and always will be jealous of Jordin.” Seems a little bit weird. Maybe it ...

Hey there mate, here on request. :) First off, this is a nice chapter. For the most part you have good spelling and grammar. However, there were something that need ...

Sorry, I don't have enough time to go through the whole thing and point out the mistakes. I'll jsut give a shorter version. FIrst off, I loved the side moment ...

Again, excellent work. I didn't see any mistakes in this chapter per say... However, you seem to have a problem with tenses. When you do a paragraph describing places and ...

Here on request. Sorry I am so late. :) After reading it through, I must say this ones pretty clean. I didn't catch many flaws, which is really good. And ...

Here I am, as you requested. :) Me? Investigating a high profile case? I couldn’t believe my ears as the caller on the other end informed me of Amanda Bailey’s ...

HEy there, here on request. :) I'm to do things a little differently here. “Eureka! I have found it at last,” I roared with excitement , waking up my wife, ...

Hey there, here on request. ;) First things first, boring sentence structure. Most of the time we see one statement and then another statement. There were many instances were you ...

Howdy there, here’s that review you requested. ;) (sorry, I would have had this earlier but I've been traveling recently.) I don’t have much to say, as this story is ...

Hey there, here on request. :) Ima have to say this right now, I liked this much better than the prologue (though that's normally the case). But really, the murder ...

Here on request. This seems familiar. I've actually read this before. :) She twisted her Korth revolver menacingly. But I still couldn't believe that she was going to do that. ...

I like the direction you are taking with this, the beginning three paragraphs were a bit dull (though of course the setting must be introduced at somepoint.) It really started ...

Pretty cool story. I liked how you started out with the difficulty sleeping, (which had an effect on her mannerisms in the rest of the story (and causes suspicion as ...

Pretty good story, I like it. The beginning was a tad heart breaking, which is what you were going for, no? And in the end they end up getting back ...

My first impression was wow. I really liked how you started this story with a bang by killing the main character's mother. And I must say, what a gruesome way ...