RavenBlack

Is it on this one, or a different one?

Thanks for the review. I kept wondering if I should keep the dialogue that you highlighted, it seemed a bit off. But now that you pointed it out I understand ...

Thanks for the review. Really appreciate it.

Thanks for the review I really needed this! Thanks for the help.

Yeah sure, happy to help xD

Sorry for late reply. I was thinking that Kayla should seem frightened, she's in an area which is unknown to her, plus it looks gloomy and dark. Instead of making ...

Omg same! I want to be an author too and I love feedback, it really helps :D

Thanks for saving the piece :-D Thanks for the review too, I've restarted my story and this will come in handy!

No problem :-D

Thanks for the review, I didn't notice these things till you pointed it out. Thanks a lot!

Oh I get it now, thanks or clearing it up xD

I'm glad you liked this one, I felt it was better to re-write it. I've got so much trouble with showing not telling, but i'll get there. Thanks again

Oh okay, my bad :-)

Thanks so much for the review

Thanks so much for the review! I hadn't noticed that I started changing viewpoints, thanks for pointing that out :-D